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The news is an important source of knowledge for all of us about the world, especially in this era of technology. Journalists are mainly responsible to bring this news to us but not all of them are true to their responsibilities and ethics. How much can we trust the journalists? v.1

The news is an important source of knowledge for all of us about the world, especially in this era of technology. Journalists are mainly responsible to bring this news to us but not all of them are true to their responsibilities and ethics. How much can we trust the journalists? v. 1
Today, with the accessibility of the internet, we can easily get the latest news on our electronic devices to know what is happening worldwide. Although I believe that most of the journalists have been asked to have integrity and courage regarding their jobs before they are qualified, we cannot completely trust them. In this digital age, the competition in the journalism industry is becoming much more fierce than ever before. In order to stay ahead of their counterparts, some journalists may report the news which they did not double-check or even fabricated. What is more, it is still possible for some journalists to make clickbait news to attract attention from the public, which enables them to get payback from internet traffic. Therefore, how to distinguish reliable information is becoming increasingly vital for us because we cannot rely on every news we come across. However, I believe that there are still numerous honest journalists who can show the truth to their readers, such as having courage and integrity. They take their profession as a responsibility to the people and are not scared of danger and threats. They even take risks and carry on tough jobs to show the truth to the audience. Such journalists are doing excellent jobs to make the world a better place. In conclusion, it will be better for us if we can do some cross-check to make sure the news we read is reliable because, in this day and age, fake news is ubiquitous. However, numerous outstanding journalists are still working to reveal the truth to the ordinary public.
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Today
, with the accessibility of the internet, we can
easily
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get
the latest
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news
on our electronic devices to know what is happening worldwide. Although I believe that most of the
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journalists
have
been asked
to have integrity and courage regarding their jobs
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before
they
are qualified
, we cannot completely trust them.

In this digital age, the competition in the journalism industry is becoming much more fierce than ever
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before
. In order to stay ahead of their counterparts,
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some
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journalists
may report the
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news
which they did not double-
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check
or even fabricated.
What is more
, it is
still
possible for
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some
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journalists
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
clickbait
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news
to attract attention from the public, which enables them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
payback from internet traffic.
Therefore
, how to distinguish reliable information is becoming
increasingly
vital for us
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because
we cannot rely on every
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news
we
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come
across.

However
, I believe that there are
still
numerous honest
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journalists
who can
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show
the truth to their readers, such as having courage and integrity. They take their profession as a responsibility to the
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people
and are not scared of
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danger
and threats. They even take
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risks
and carry on tough jobs to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
the truth to the audience. Such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
journalists
are doing excellent jobs to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the world a better place.

In conclusion
, it will be better for us if we can do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
cross-
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check
to
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make
sure the
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news
we read is reliable
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
, in this day and age, fake
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
is ubiquitous.
However
, numerous outstanding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
journalists
are
still
working to reveal the truth to the ordinary public.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay The news is an important source of knowledge for all of us about the world, especially in this era of technology. Journalists are mainly responsible to bring this news to us but not all of them are true to their responsibilities and ethics. How much can we trust the journalists? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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