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The natural resources such as oil, fresh water and forests are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problem does it cause? How can we solve these problems,

Nowadays, there has been a rise in consumption of natural resources which is damaging the environment in various ways such as pollution. However, such issues can be solved by collective measures taken by government and public. To begin with, it is almost universally accepted that environment failing is a consequence of over utilization of natural resources. Firstly, oil is specially used by vehicles and industries, and as a result, the air pollution is dramatically increasing. For instance, New Delhi, the capital of India, due to air pollution, is facing inconvenience which is mainly caused by vehicles and factories. Secondly, fresh water is depleting rapidly. It should not be forgotten that without water, there is no life. Besides, people are lavishly fresh water and are not trying to conserve it. Perhaps the most crucial is caused by deforestation. Due to logging at a great extent, the ecological balance is getting disturbed like rainfall and the greenhouse gas emission. Furthermore, even the birds and animals are facing problems of extinction. When the trees are cut, the chances of soil erosion are to grow. Therefore, due to over consumption of natural resources, a myriad of problems occur in the nature. However, such issues can be solved by numerous efforts. While government must take prime responsibility for conserving the natural resources, the individuals too can play a part. Primarily, the state can encourage citizens to use electric car instead of oil. Seen in this light it will not only save environment but also be of vital economic significance to people. Also, the government can organize awareness campaigns of water saving. The individuals can plant more trees in nearby localities or in their houses, and also, can make posters to prevent environment related problems. Moreover, all of these can be taught by teachers at school so that children from a young age will try to take care of environment. This, all these methods can help to solve environmental issues. To sum up, it is both the state's and the people's duty to safeguard the nature and utilize less natural resources as it can cause severe problems.
Nowadays, there has been a rise in consumption of
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natural
resources which is damaging the
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environment
in various ways such as pollution.
However
, such issues can
be solved
by collective measures taken by
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government
and public.

To
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begin
with, it is almost
universally
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accepted
that
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environment
failing is a consequence of over utilization of
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natural
resources.
Firstly
, oil is
specially
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used
by vehicles and industries, and
as a result
, the air pollution is
dramatically
increasing.
For instance
, New Delhi, the capital of India, due to air pollution, is facing inconvenience which is
mainly
caused by vehicles and factories.
Secondly
, fresh
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water
is depleting
rapidly
. It should not
be forgotten
that without
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water
, there is no life.
Besides
,
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people
are
lavishly
fresh
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water
and are not trying to conserve it. Perhaps the most crucial
is caused
by deforestation. Due to logging at a great extent, the ecological balance is getting disturbed like rainfall and the greenhouse gas emission.
Furthermore
, even the birds and animals are facing
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problems
of extinction. When the trees are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
, the chances of soil erosion are to grow.
Therefore
, due to over consumption of
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natural
resources, a myriad of
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problems
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occur
in the nature.

However
, such issues can
be solved
by numerous efforts. While
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government
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must
take prime responsibility for conserving the
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natural
resources, the individuals too can play a part.
Primarily
, the state can encourage citizens to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
electric car
instead
of oil.
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Seen
in this light it will not
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only
save
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environment
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but
also
be of vital economic significance to
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people
.
Also
, the
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government
can organize awareness campaigns of
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water
saving. The individuals can plant more trees in nearby localities or in their
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houses
, and
also
, can
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make
posters to
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prevent
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environment
related
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problems
.
Moreover
, all of these can
be taught
by teachers at school
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so
that children from a young age will try to take care of
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environment
. This, all these methods can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to solve environmental issues.

To sum up, it is both the state's and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's duty to safeguard the nature and utilize less
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
resources as it can cause severe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
.
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IELTS essay The natural resources such as oil, fresh water and forests are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problem does it cause? How can we solve these problems,

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