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Some people support the development of factory farming and the science creation of fruits and vegetables in agriculture, but others oppose to these developments. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, Technology is growing more and more in humans life and also in every sector. A number of people opine that the development in agriculture like in farming sector has increased so much, and hybridization of different fruits and vegetables. While, others totally disagree with this activities. This essay will discuss both views and further give opinions. Individual believes that there are several benefits by such development in agriculture. The first and foremost, that by usage of advanced technological equipments irrigation has become more productivity and effortless. Due to which it is easy to feed increasing population. Moreover, fruits and vegetables are also rising speedly. Besides, by hybridization many new varieties of plants and vegetables are invented and because of that people get new tastes and different shapes of it. However, Other people to strongly oppose this development because they think it has several drawbacks. Firstly, because of the different fertilizers and pesticides fruits and vegetables can't maintain there original properties such as vitamins and minerals, as they grow they loss it. Secondly, by spraying some unhealthy chemicals during irrigation, it not only harms plants and land but it also effects human bodys. In conclusion, in my opinion development should begin, but there should not be any harms to environment. People should forcus morn in natural fertilizers instead of using chemicals.
Nowadays, Technology is growing more and more in humans life and
also
in every sector. A number of
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people
opine that the
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development
in agriculture like in farming sector has increased
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so
much, and hybridization of
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different
fruits and
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vegetables
.
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While
, others
totally
disagree with
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activities. This essay will discuss both views and
further
give opinions.

Individual believes that there are several benefits by such
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development
in agriculture. The
first
and foremost, that by usage of advanced technological
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equipments
irrigation has become more productivity and effortless. Due to which it is easy to feed increasing population.
Moreover
, fruits and
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vegetables
are
also
rising
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speedly
.
Besides
, by hybridization
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many
new varieties of plants and
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vegetables
are invented
and
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because
of that
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people
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get
new tastes and
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different
shapes of it.

However
, Other
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people
to
strongly
oppose this
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development
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because
they
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it has several drawbacks.
Firstly
,
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because
of the
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different
fertilizers and pesticides fruits and
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vegetables
can't maintain there original properties such as vitamins and minerals, as they grow they
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loss
it.
Secondly
, by spraying
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some
unhealthy chemicals during irrigation, it not
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only
harms plants and land
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but
it
also
effects human
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bodys
.

In conclusion
, in my opinion
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development
should
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begin
,
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but
there should not be any harms to environment.
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People
should
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forcus
morn in natural fertilizers
instead
of using chemicals.
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IELTS essay Some people support the development of factory farming and the science creation of fruits and vegetables in agriculture, but others oppose to these developments.

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  American English
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