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The most important thing to consider when looking for a job is the salary offer.” Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Since the start of civilization, money has been an important factor in our daily lives so when finding a job most people think that salary is the most important component to consider. I strongly disagree that a paycheck is the most important part of a job. This essay will prove this perspective. Firstly, Don't do a job you aren’t passionate about for its high salary. This would only result in stress for the rest of your life because you might do something you don't love for your whole life without stopping and as a result, you would have to regret this choice you made for your life and can't do anything about it, all because of money. For example, you wanted to be a photographer but it doesn’t pay as much as an accountant so you went for the accountant job because you thought you would be less stressed about money however you soon come to realize that doing this job is more stressful for the long term and you can’t switch jobs because it's too late. Another point I would like to explain is, you will never make enough money. You got a job for its high salary but you'll always need more and more and you will never make enough to satisfy your needs and become a slave to money even when you retire you still won't have enough money so why not just do the job you love for less money but still be happy. I heard somewhere that happiness is the key to success and this is true in this situation. For example, You might be stuck between choosing to working for a company and starting your own business and you chose to work for the company because it pays good and is safer but even if the company pays you highly won’t ever make enough money and always want more nevertheless, if u had started your own company even though it failed at least you're happy you got to try it out. On the other hand, it might be a huge success and you might even become the top 1% of the world. All things considered, doing a job for the money isn’t entirely bad but ignoring your feelings is worst. In my opinion, everybody should try to do the things they love at least once in their life.
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when finding a
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most
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that salary is the most
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component to consider. I
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part of a
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. This essay will prove this perspective.

Firstly
, Don't do a
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you aren’t passionate about for its high salary. This would
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result in
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stress
for the rest of your
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you
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do something you don't
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for your whole
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without stopping and
as a result
, you would
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have to
regret this choice you made for your
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and can't do anything about it, all
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because
of
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.
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, you wanted to be a photographer
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but
it doesn’t pay as much as an accountant
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you went for the accountant
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you would be less
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however
you
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soon
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to realize that doing this
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is more stressful for the long term and you can’t switch
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because
it's too late.

Another point I would like to
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for its high salary
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you'll always need more and more and you will never
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enough
to satisfy your needs and become a slave to
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even when you retire you
still
won't have
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why not
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you
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for less
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still
be happy. I heard somewhere that happiness is the key to success and this is true in this situation.
For example
, You
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might
be stuck
between choosing to working for a
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company
and starting your
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own
business and you chose to work for the
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because
it pays
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good
and is safer
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but
even if the
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pays you
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won’t ever
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make
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and always want more
nevertheless
, if u had
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started
your
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even though
it failed at least you're happy you
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got
to try it out.
On the other hand
, it
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might
be a huge success and you
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might
even become the top 1% of the world.

All things considered, doing a
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for the
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isn’t
entirely
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bad
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ignoring your feelings is worst. In my opinion, everybody should try to do the things they
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IELTS essay The most important thing to consider when looking for a job is the salary offer. ”

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
394 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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