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The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. 8PEm
a number of may hold opinion that it is essential to consider about high income whenever it is time to make a desicion of what kind of job better to choose. Nevertheless, I disagree with this statement, because of several causes which are going to be eloborated in ditail below. First and foremost, I recon that it is not necessary to opt the job which is willing to bring us low income, inasmuchas each of individual has got a right to work on job which makes sence in their life. In other words, we ought to erdicate and prioritize the meaning of career or job in order to show that it can be utilized not sollely for earning money, but also for life sitisfaction. For instance, there are a quite big proportion of artist in the globe, so they do not earn tramendous amount of money, however they love their job and apprisiate as well. I am sure that they never change their performance to white colour job, for example, because it makes them happy and substantially different from others. Hence, people need not to care about the money which they will obtain in the future, due to the simple fact that this option is not going to make them happier. Last but not least, I believe that there is not any significance of choosing job or career with the high figures of income, because in the era of globalization, all of us have got the chance to make our own personal desicion of the job which will definetely suite us. The undenyable fact behind my point of view is that the work after honorfull selection will be with us during all of our life, and the incorrect action will certainly effect negativelly. It is pertinent to say that most of successful businessmen are not happy to work in such profession. Meaning that the steriotips about well paid jobs are the pitfall. Therefore, it is specifically vital to make acurate choose. To sum up, two clear explanation above are the main reasons why do i disacree with this idea.
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hold opinion that it is essential to
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consider about high
income whenever it is time to
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make
a
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desicion
of what kind of
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job
better to choose.
Nevertheless
, I disagree with this statement,
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because
of several causes which are going to be
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eloborated
in
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ditail
below.

First
and foremost,
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I recon
that it is not necessary to opt the
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job
which is willing to bring us low income,
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inasmuchas
each of individual has
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got
a right to work on
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job
which
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makes
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sence
in their life.
In other words
, we ought to
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erdicate
and prioritize the meaning of career or
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job
in order to
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show
that it can
be utilized
not
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sollely
for earning money,
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but
also
for life
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sitisfaction
.
For instance
, there are a quite
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big
proportion of artist in the globe,
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so
they do not earn
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tramendous
amount of money,
however
they
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love
their
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job
and
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apprisiate
as well
. I am sure that they never
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change
their performance to white
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colour
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job
,
for example
,
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because
it
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makes
them happy and
substantially
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different
from others.
Hence
,
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people
need not
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to care
about the money which they will obtain in the future, due to the simple fact that this option is not going to
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make
them happier.

Last
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but
not least, I believe that there is not any significance of choosing
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job
or career with the high figures of income,
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because
in the era of globalization, all of us have
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got
the chance to
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our
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personal
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desicion
of the
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job
which will
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definetely
suite us. The
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undenyable
fact behind my point of view is that the work after
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honorfull
selection will be with us during all of our life, and the incorrect action will
certainly
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effect
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negativelly
. It is pertinent to say that most of successful businessmen are not happy to work in such profession. Meaning that the
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steriotips
about well paid
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jobs
are the pitfall.

Therefore
, it is
specifically
vital to
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make
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acurate
choose.

To sum up, two
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explanation above are the main reasons why do i
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disacree
with this
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IELTS essay The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
349 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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