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The most effective way to solve traffic and transport problems in the cities is to discourage people from the suburbs or the countryside from moving to the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The most effective way to solve traffic and transport problems in the cities is to discourage people from the suburbs or the countryside from moving to the cities. PQWp
It is irrefutable that increasing traffic has become a grave problem worldwide. The best solution to this issue is to demotivate the public from the outskirts or rural areas to relocate to urban places. I completely agree with this statement. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall put forth the arguments in favour of my opinion. If the cities could accommodate a large number of population, then migrating villagers to towns would have been a feasible option to combat traffic congestion. This is because the masses living in hamlets have jobs in the metropolitan cities. Consequently, every morning they commute all the way from their home to their office in the city causing traffic jams along the way. Vehicles caught in traffic emit more poisonous gases to the atmosphere and thus increase air pollution. By contrast, if they live in a place near their office in the city, they can reduce their travelling time and distance. Apparently, this is not the case and most posh areas are starved for space. Owing to the above fact, the most fitting option is to encourage businesses to set up their operations in countryside places. This will create more job opportunities for nearby people eradicating the need for them travel to long distances. Thus, this will reduce traffic jams on the roads from suburbs to modern cities. Also, it will beneficial for companies to operate in a calm and pollution-free environment. One such example is the IT sector built-in Hyderabad in the year 2000 in the outskirts of Gacchibowli. This business sector has proven to be advantageous to the surrounding human beings by providing employment opportunities and also increased their standard of living. In conclusion, since cities are already overcrowded, it is not practical to move rural people to urban areas with the objective of reducing traffic and pollution. A better solution is to reduce the need for people to travel by providing them with job opportunities close to where they live.
It is irrefutable that increasing
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traffic
has become a grave problem worldwide. The best solution to this issue is to demotivate the public from the outskirts or rural areas to relocate to urban places. I completely
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agree
with this statement. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall put forth the arguments in
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favour
of my opinion.

If the
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cities
could accommodate
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a large number of
population, then migrating villagers to towns would have been a feasible option to combat
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traffic
congestion. This is
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because
the masses living in hamlets have jobs in the metropolitan
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cities
.
Consequently
, every morning they commute all the way from their home to their office in the city causing
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traffic
jams along the way. Vehicles caught in
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traffic
emit more poisonous gases to the atmosphere and
thus
increase air pollution. By contrast, if they
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live
in a place near their office in the city, they can
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reduce
their travelling time and distance.
Apparently
, this is not the case and most posh areas
are starved
for space.

Owing to the above fact, the most fitting option is to encourage businesses to set up their operations in countryside places. This will create more job opportunities for nearby
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people
eradicating the need for them travel to long distances.
Thus
, this will
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reduce
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traffic
jams on the roads from suburbs to modern
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cities
.
Also
, it
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will beneficial
for
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companies
to operate in a calm and pollution-free environment.

One such example is the IT sector built-in Hyderabad in the year 2000 in the outskirts of
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Gacchibowli
. This business sector has proven to be advantageous to the surrounding human beings by providing employment opportunities and
also
increased their standard of living.

In conclusion
, since
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cities
are already overcrowded, it is not practical to
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move
rural
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people
to urban areas with the objective of reducing
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traffic
and pollution. A better solution is to
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reduce
the need for
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people
to travel by providing them with job opportunities close to where they
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live
.
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IELTS essay The most effective way to solve traffic and transport problems in the cities is to discourage people from the suburbs or the countryside from moving to the cities.

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