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The material discusses the concept of ways could be use to reduce the salinity of the Salton Sea.

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The material discusses the concept of ways could be use to reduce the salinity of the Salton Sea. While the reading looks at the topic from one perspective, the listening challenges certain points outlines in the reading topic. Firstly, the reading details specific point regarding to this topic, namely, remove the salt from the lake by desalination processes. Next, dilute lake’s water by adding water from the Pacific Ocean. Finally, divided the lake into several section. Conversely, the listening challenges the points, one specific contradiction is removing salts from the water may have health risk, because the Salton lake’s water contains chemical materials rather than salt; furthermore, these materials could be toxic, such as Sillinum. They will escape to atmosphere and people could breath it and cause critical health problem. In addition to that, add water from The Pacific Ocean is a big constructing project, while government does not have the recourse to this major construct, because the lake is hundred kilometers long. One final point, divided the lake my using separate walls could not be a solution for long time, because of the geological action. Provided that an earthquake happen, these walls will be collapsed and the water from the large portion wilth low amount of salt will mix with the small portion with large amount of salt.
The material discusses the concept of ways could be
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use to
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the salinity of the Salton Sea. While the reading looks at the topic from one perspective, the listening challenges certain
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points
outlines in the reading topic.

Firstly
, the reading
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specific
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point
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regarding to
this topic,
namely
, remove the
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salt
from the
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lake
by desalination processes.
Next
, dilute
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lake’s
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water
by adding
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water
from the Pacific Ocean.
Finally
, divided the
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lake
into
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.

Conversely
, the listening challenges the
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points
, one specific contradiction is removing
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salts
from the
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water
may have health
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risk
,
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because
the Salton
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lake’s
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water
contains chemical materials
rather
than
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salt
;
furthermore
, these materials could be toxic, such as
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Sillinum
. They will escape to atmosphere and
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people
could
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it and cause critical health problem.
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add
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water
from The Pacific Ocean is a
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big
constructing project, while
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government
does not have the recourse to this major construct,
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because
the
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lake
is
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hundred
kilometers long. One final
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point
, divided the
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lake
my using separate walls could not be a solution for long time,
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because
of the geological action. Provided that an earthquake happen, these walls will
be collapsed
and the
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water
from the large portion
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wilth
low amount of
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salt
will mix with the
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small
portion with large amount of
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salt
.
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IELTS essay The material discusses the concept of ways could be use to reduce the salinity of the Salton Sea.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
219 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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