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The manufacturing and use of cars damages the environment but their popularity is increasing. why is this happening ? How could be controlled.

The manufacturing and use of cars damages the environment but their popularity is increasing. why is this happening? How could be controlled. 5GEn
Usage of automotive has been increasing day by day. Although, more car usage spoiling environment but nowadays it become necessity of individuals. This essay will discuss the reason and put forward several solutions for this issue. To commence, modern era in developed countries families has same number of cars as family members. Because they can maintain their privacy as no-one see from outside and almost every family member are working now so they can earn money and buy cars very easily as car are not expensive in developed nations. Moreover, cars are helpful to cut down distance and save time and energy of persons. For instance, during ancient time people used horses and camels for travelling that took huge time however car are convenient in travelling to long distance. To put on halt to this problem, government should take some steps as more cars means more pollution. Firstly, high authorities should make proper rule and regulations. In other words put a limit on number of cars and life of car as old cars generate more pollution. Apart from this, government should increase taxes on manufacturing of car as it will lead to increase in price that discourage individual to buy cars. Furthermore, legal authorities should keep an eye on documents related to service of vehicles, pollution test while examination of driver and car and impose huge amount of fine in case of violation of law. In conclusion, environment can be saved by collective steps of all nations and individuals. World environment should come forward and give some guidelines to every country to save environment for future generations.
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usage spoiling
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nowadays it
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necessity of individuals. This essay will discuss the reason and put forward several solutions for this issue.

To commence, modern era in
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developed countries
families has same number of
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cars
as family members.
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Because
they can maintain their privacy as no-one
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see
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now
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so
they can earn money and
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buy
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cars
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very
easily
as
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car
are not expensive in developed nations.
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,
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cars
are helpful to
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cut
down distance and save time and energy of persons.
For instance
, during ancient time
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people
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used
horses and camels for travelling that took huge time
however
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car
are convenient in travelling to long distance.

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government
should take
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some
steps as more
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cars
means more pollution.
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, high authorities should
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make
proper
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rule
and regulations.
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put a limit on number of
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cars
and life of
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car
as
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old
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cars
generate more pollution. Apart from this,
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government
should increase taxes on manufacturing of
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car
as it will lead to increase in price that discourage individual to
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buy
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cars
.
Furthermore
, legal authorities should
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keep
an eye on documents related to service of vehicles, pollution
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test
while examination of driver and
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car
and impose huge amount of fine in case of violation of law.

In conclusion
,
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environment
can
be saved
by collective steps of all nations and individuals. World
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environment
should
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come
forward and give
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some
guidelines to every country to save
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environment
for future generations.
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IELTS essay The manufacturing and use of cars damages the environment but their popularity is increasing. why is this happening? How could be controlled.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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