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The line graph shows the information on the ratio of youth to the population

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The line graph shows the information on the ratio of youth to the population of England between 1990 and 2001. It can be seen that the maturity group of the children is divided into four groups. In general, the proportion of newborn infants between the ages of 0-4 has a decreasing trend, besides there is a sharp increase in the proportion of youth elderly 10-14. From the graph, we can see that there are about 23% of youth between the ages of 10 and 14, 1% less than the percentage of adolescents aged 5 to 9 in 1990. merely over 1 in 4 youth between the ages of 15 and 19 in the UK during the same period, while that index was equal to that of juvenile elderly 0 to 4 in the same 1990. By 1992, the number of newborns had continued to decline by nearly 4% and overall almost 23% of all infants in the UK in 2001. Also in 2001, youth aged 15 to 19 accounted for 25% of all young people in the UK. Looking more deeply, the capacity of adolescent elderly 10 to 14 tends to increase sharply and makes up most of the proportion of toddlers in the UK. while the number of youth from 5 to 9 years ancient decreased gradually and by 2001 it only accounted for 25%, down more than 1% compared to the old rate in the period 1995 to 1997.
The line graph
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shows
the information on the ratio of
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youth
to the population of England between 1990 and 2001. It can be
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seen
that the maturity group of the children
is divided
into four groups.
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, the proportion of newborn infants between the ages of 0-4 has a decreasing trend,
besides
there is a sharp increase in the proportion of
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youth
elderly 10-14.

From the graph, we can
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see
that there are about 23% of
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youth
between the ages of 10 and 14, 1% less than the percentage of adolescents aged 5 to 9 in 1990.
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merely
over 1 in 4
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youth
between the ages of 15 and 19 in the UK during the same period, while that index was equal to that of juvenile elderly 0 to 4 in the same 1990. By 1992, the number of newborns had continued to decline by
nearly
4% and
overall
almost 23% of all infants in the UK in 2001.
Also
in 2001,
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youth
aged 15 to 19 accounted for 25% of all young
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people
in the UK.

Looking more
deeply
, the capacity of adolescent elderly 10 to 14 tends to increase
sharply
and
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makes
up most of the proportion of toddlers in the UK. while the number of
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youth
from 5 to 9 years ancient decreased
gradually
and by 2001 it
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only
accounted for 25%, down more than 1% compared to the
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old
rate in the period 1995 to 1997.
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IELTS essay The line graph shows the information on the ratio of youth to the population

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
241 words
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