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The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication However it s often controversial so many people think it needs to be controlled Others believe there should be no interference whatsoever Discuss both points of vie v.2

The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication However it s often controversial so many people think it needs to be controlled Others believe there should be no interference whatsoever 2
With the development of modern technology, the internet has emerged as the most widely used source of Information and Communication, worldwide. Some people opine that there should be a certain degree of restriction over this, while others opine that there should be no restrictions. I, however, support the latter point of view and the following essay will provide the justification. Internet enables us to remain updated with the latest information. The changes in the job market Trends are the latest offers on products can all be accessed within seconds via the world wide web which helps people make better choice quicker. For example, when coronavirus became pandemic, people were instantly aware of it due to the news published on the the internet because of which people were able to take necessary precautions before the disease affected them. Communication has also become much easier and modernized. Previously, people could only talk via telephones. But with the availability of the internet, they also see their friends and family who lives miles away via video calls. In addition, they can share their news, photos and videos conveniently and instantly. However, jar can be some negative impacts of internet. Many antisocial people could use it to buy illegal products like drugs or become involved in cyber crimes such as hacking. But with the constant monitoring from cyber security division and alertness of the public these negativities can be eliminated. To sum up, I believe that there should be no restrictions in the use of internet as it provides facilities like latest information and faster communication although there could be some bad implications it can be controlled with proper measures.
With the development of modern technology, the internet has emerged as the most
widely
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used
source of Information and Communication, worldwide.
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Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
opine that there should be a certain degree of restriction over this, while others opine that there should be no restrictions. I,
however
, support the latter point of view and the following essay will provide the justification.

Internet enables us to remain updated with the latest information. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in the job market Trends are the latest offers on products can all
be accessed
within seconds via the
If the term is a proper noun, use initial capitals.
world wide web
which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
better choice quicker.
For example
, when coronavirus became pandemic,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
were
instantly
aware of it due to the news published on
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the the
internet
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because
of which
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people
were able to take necessary precautions
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before
the disease
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affected
them.

Communication has
also
become much easier and modernized. Previously,
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people
could
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only
talk via telephones.
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But
with the availability of the internet, they
also
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see
their friends and family who
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lives
miles away via video calls.
In addition
, they can share their news, photos and videos
conveniently
and
instantly
.

However
, jar can be
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some
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negative
impacts of internet.
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Many
antisocial
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people
could
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use
it to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
illegal products like drugs or become involved in cyber crimes such as hacking.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
with the constant monitoring from cyber security division and alertness of the public these negativities can
be eliminated
.

To sum up, I believe that there should be no restrictions in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of internet as it provides facilities like latest information and faster communication although there could be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
implications it can
be controlled
with proper measures.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication However it s often controversial so many people think it needs to be controlled Others believe there should be no interference whatsoever 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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