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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? v.18

The internet has greatly increased our access to information. v. 18
AFTER THE ENOVATION IN THE TECHNOLOGY, PEOPLE ARE ABLE TO GET ALL KID OF INFORMATION THROUGH IT SUCH AS, WATCHING NEW A LIVE ON MOBIEL DEVISE. THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW IT IS UP 70 CONCURE DUE TO SOME BENEFITS AND REST OF IT OPPOSE BECAUSE OF DRAWBACKS WITH RELEVANT SUPPORTING DETAILS AND EXAMPLES. TO START WITH, FIRST OF ALL, STUDENT IS BENEFITED A LOT WITH TECHNOLOGY. TO ELABORATE, WHATEVER INFORMATION THEY ARE NOT FIND IN THE BOOKS OR LIBRARY, THEY CAN GOOGLE IT THROUGH INTERNET. FOR AM INSTANCE, I AM DOING RESEARCH AND SOMEO INFORMATION I AM NOT GETING FROM THE BOOKS BUT WITH AN ASSET OF INTERNET I CAN ENROLL MY SELF FOR THAT PARTICULAR TOPIC ON THE WEBSITE IN THE WHOLE GLOBE AND DO FURTHER RESEARCH. SECOND OF ALL, TROUGH INTERNET SOME PEOPLE CAN DO PREDICTION ABOUT WEATHER AND USE IT FOR THEIR FARMING PURPOSE SUCH AS FARMERS. TO ILLUSTRATE, DUE TO WIRELESS INTERNET, OW FARMERS CAN CHECK THE DROUGHT AND DO THEIR CROPING ACCORDING TO THAT. FOR AN EXAMPPLE, MY FATHER WHO IS A FARMER SINCE HE RETIRED FROM GOVERNMENT SCHOLL USING WEATHER FORCAST TO SEE WHICH CROP IS SUITABLE FOR THE COMING SEASON, WHEN IT WILL RAIN ANDHOW MUCH ETC. HOWEVER, NOT ALWAYS, THAT PREDICTION ARE ACCURATE BIT STILL AT SOME POINT IT IS USEFUL SPECIALLY FOR FARMERS. IN CONTRAST, MORE INTERNET DOES MAKE A PERSON IN TROUBLE WITH SOME ERRORS LIKE HUMAN ERROS, OR TECHNICAL FAULT. TO EXPLAN IN THE DETAIL, SOMETIME PEOPLE MAKE SOM APPLICATIONTHROUGH IT WILL BE EASY TO DO FRAUD SUCH AS, VIRUS, OR BUGS. FOR EN INSTANCE, ONE OF MY FRIEND HAD FACED THIS SITUATION, WHEN SHE WAS IN THE CLASS 9TH. ONE PERSON WHO WAS STRABGER SHE MADE HIM HER FRIEND AND GONE TO REATIONSHIP. AFTER SOME TIME HIS BOYFRIEND HAD MADE HER PORN VIDEO AND PUCLISHED ON THE INTERNET JUST BECAUSE OF SOME MONEY. THUS INTERNET IS ALSO A DANGER WHEN NOT USED WTIH PRECAUTION. TO SUM UP, THAT IS TRUE THAT IT HAS MANY BENETITS, INCREASED USAGE OF THAT MADE HUMAN LIFE EASY AND FAST BUT SHOULD BE USED WITH CARE. TO TAKLE THIS THERE SHOULD BE SOME MORE PRIVACY PROTECTION REQUIRE.
AFTER THE
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ENOVATION
IN THE TECHNOLOGY,
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PEOPLE
ARE ABLE TO
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GET
ALL KID OF INFORMATION THROUGH IT SUCH AS, WATCHING NEW A
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LIVE
ON
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MOBIEL
DEVISE. THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW IT IS UP 70
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CONCURE
DUE TO
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SOME
BENEFITS AND REST OF IT OPPOSE
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BECAUSE
OF DRAWBACKS WITH RELEVANT SUPPORTING
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DETAILS
AND EXAMPLES.

TO
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START
WITH,
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FIRST OF ALL
, STUDENT
IS BENEFITED
A LOT WITH TECHNOLOGY. TO ELABORATE, WHATEVER INFORMATION THEY ARE NOT FIND IN THE BOOKS OR LIBRARY, THEY CAN GOOGLE IT THROUGH INTERNET. FOR AM INSTANCE, I AM DOING RESEARCH AND
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SOMEO
INFORMATION I AM NOT
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GETING
FROM THE BOOKS
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BUT
WITH AN ASSET OF INTERNET I CAN ENROLL MY SELF FOR THAT PARTICULAR TOPIC ON THE WEBSITE IN THE WHOLE GLOBE AND DO
FURTHER
RESEARCH. SECOND OF ALL, TROUGH INTERNET
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SOME
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PEOPLE
CAN DO PREDICTION ABOUT WEATHER AND
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USE
IT FOR THEIR FARMING PURPOSE SUCH AS FARMERS. TO ILLUSTRATE, DUE TO WIRELESS INTERNET, OW FARMERS CAN
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CHECK
THE DROUGHT AND DO THEIR
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CROPING
ACCORDING TO THAT. FOR AN
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EXAMPPLE
, MY FATHER WHO IS A FARMER SINCE HE RETIRED FROM
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GOVERNMENT
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SCHOLL
USING WEATHER
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FORCAST
TO
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SEE
WHICH CROP IS SUITABLE FOR THE COMING SEASON, WHEN IT WILL RAIN
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ANDHOW
MUCH ETC.
HOWEVER
, NOT ALWAYS, THAT PREDICTION ARE ACCURATE BIT
STILL
AT
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SOME
POINT IT IS USEFUL
SPECIALLY
FOR FARMERS.

IN CONTRAST
, MORE INTERNET DOES
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MAKE
A PERSON IN TROUBLE WITH
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SOME
ERRORS LIKE HUMAN
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ERROS
, OR TECHNICAL FAULT. TO
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EXPLAN
IN THE DETAIL, SOMETIME
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PEOPLE
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MAKE
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SOM
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APPLICATIONTHROUGH
IT WILL BE EASY TO DO FRAUD SUCH AS, VIRUS, OR BUGS. FOR EN INSTANCE, ONE OF MY FRIEND HAD FACED THIS SITUATION, WHEN SHE WAS IN THE
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CLASS
9TH. ONE PERSON WHO WAS
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STRABGER
SHE MADE HIM HER FRIEND AND GONE TO
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REATIONSHIP
. AFTER
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SOME
TIME HIS BOYFRIEND HAD MADE HER PORN VIDEO AND
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PUCLISHED
ON THE INTERNET
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JUST
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BECAUSE
OF
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SOME
MONEY.
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THUS
INTERNET IS
ALSO
A
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DANGER
WHEN NOT
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USED
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WTIH
PRECAUTION.

TO SUM UP,
THAT IS
TRUE THAT IT HAS
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MANY
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BENETITS
, INCREASED USAGE OF THAT MADE HUMAN LIFE EASY AND
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FAST
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BUT
SHOULD BE
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USED
WITH CARE. TO
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TAKLE
THIS THERE SHOULD BE
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SOME
MORE PRIVACY PROTECTION REQUIRE.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay The internet has greatly increased our access to information. v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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