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The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this? v.5

The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this? v. 5
With the internet entering our lives, many changes have occurred in recent years. However, It is true that internet technology effects modern life both well and badly in many aspects. I strongly believe the pros far outweight the cons. First of all, it is an indusputable fact that the internet has revolutionized us by allowing us to communicate in many areas. People could make use of internet for talking with an online video although they have long distance. Social media sites like MSN Messenger, instagram, facebook and twitter are ideal places to keep in touch with friends or family from all walks of life. Further, It is inevitable to access easily most information on the internet. In addition to online libraries, information flows are easier extremely thanks to academic research sites. For instance, scientists from all over the world publish their Master or PhD dissertations articles as well as books on sites such as Google Scholar, Science Direct and Pubmed, enabling reseachers in other countries to use this information. Using of internet result in also negative influences. The social life of network citizens is incredibly affected. They spend too much time on internet instead of talking to each other, which makes it difficult to focus real-world and lose their abilities to communicate with other persons. Besides, There are websites with abuse of the internet. For example; they are a threatening factor for children's psychology because they have violent or sexual contents. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm that the skyrocketing change of Internet has brought more benefits than drawbacks.
With the internet entering our
lives
,
many
changes
have occurred in recent years.
However
, It is true that internet technology effects modern life both well and
badly
in
many
aspects. I
strongly
believe the pros far
outweight
the cons.

First of all
, it is an
indusputable
fact that the internet has revolutionized us by allowing us to communicate in
many
areas.
People
could
make
use
of internet for talking with an online video although they have long
distance
. Social media sites like MSN Messenger,
instagram
,
facebook
and twitter are ideal places to
keep
in touch with friends or family from all walks of life.
Further
, It is inevitable to access
easily
most information on the internet.
In addition
to online libraries, information flows are easier
extremely
thanks to academic research sites.
For instance
, scientists from all over the world publish their Master or PhD dissertations articles
as well
as books on sites such as Google Scholar, Science Direct and
Pubmed
, enabling
reseachers
in other countries to
use
this information.

Using of internet result in
also
negative
influences. The social life of network citizens is
incredibly
affected
. They spend too much time on internet
instead
of talking to each other, which
makes
it difficult to focus real-world and lose their abilities to communicate with other persons.
Besides
, There are websites with abuse of the internet.
For example
; they are a threatening factor for children's psychology
because
they have violent or sexual contents.

By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm that the skyrocketing
change
of Internet has brought more benefits than drawbacks.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
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