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The internet has brought about many changes into our day to day life.

The internet has brought about many changes into our day to day life. VQ20Q
The internet has transformed people’s lives. It has changed the way we communicate with each other, transact business and access information. Although the internet has both positive and negative aspects, I believe that its merits outweigh its demerits. To begin with, thanks to the internet, people can now contact their friends, family and colleagues faster and more efficiently than in the past. Most people have internet connection on their mobile or computer and as a result, they can always stay connected with their near and dear ones. For example, social networking applications like WhatsApp, Facebook and Twitter allow people to chat and share videos and other important information. Similarly, through facilities like video conferencing and webinars people from different parts of the world can now participate in online conferences which eliminate the need to travel to other countries and cities for attending such programmes. Additionally, online shopping and banking have saved people a great deal of time and effort. People today can sit at home and buy their grocery, books or household appliances from online sites such as Amazon or eBay and their stuff will be delivered at home. Moreover, transferring and withdrawing money have become very easy today with online facilities offered by most banks. On the other hand, a great deal of offensive and obscene content is available on the web and children have easy access to them. Many antisocial elements and terrorist groups like ISIS recruit youngsters through the internet. Internet addiction is another problem. Many people are now addicted to the internet and wasting their time. This can affect their career and relationships. In conclusion, the internet has greatly benefited people in different ways. Although it has some negative aspects it can be handled efficiently by implementing proper laws and regulations and through parental supervision.
The internet has transformed
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lives
. It has
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changed
the way we communicate with each
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, transact business and access information. Although the internet has both
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positive
and
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aspects, I believe that its merits outweigh its demerits.

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begin
with, thanks to the internet,
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people
can
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now
contact their friends, family and colleagues faster and more
efficiently
than in the past. Most
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people
have internet connection on their mobile or computer and
as a result
, they can always stay connected with their near and dear ones.
For example
, social networking applications like WhatsApp, Facebook and Twitter
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allow
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people
to chat and share videos and
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other
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important
information.
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, through facilities like video conferencing and webinars
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people
from
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different
parts of the world can
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now
participate in
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online
conferences which eliminate the need to travel to
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other
countries and cities for attending such
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programmes
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Additionally
,
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shopping and banking have saved
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a great deal of time and effort.
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People
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today
can sit at home and
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buy
their grocery, books or household appliances from
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online
sites such as Amazon or eBay and their stuff will
be delivered
at home.
Moreover
, transferring and withdrawing money have become
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very
easy
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today
with
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facilities offered by most banks.

On the
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hand, a great deal of offensive and obscene content is available on the web and children have easy access to them.
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Many
antisocial elements and terrorist groups like ISIS recruit youngsters through the internet. Internet addiction is another problem.
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Many
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people
are
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now
addicted to the internet and wasting their time. This can affect their career and relationships.

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, the internet has
greatly
benefited
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people
in
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different
ways. Although it has
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negative
aspects it can
be handled
efficiently
by implementing proper laws and regulations and through parental supervision.
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IELTS essay The internet has brought about many changes into our day to day life.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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