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Museums are for education

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Individuals often present differing views on whether museums should be a venue for entertainment or education. While there are certain benefits to partaking in museum exhibits and activities as pure entertainment, museums are at their core, education facilities that seek to educate using more playful, interactive methods. On one hand, museums at first glance are often primary, urban attractions that seek to enrich the cultural landscape of the city. They display items that are of historical or cultural significance to the region. For example, history museums underline the historical roots that allow for better understanding of present societal frameworks. Arts museums highlight local artists and shows that are monumental or influential to the local art scene. As many visitors feel bored by mechanically framed lectures and walls of information, museums focus on making the process interactive, ascetically pleasing, often immersing the visitor in a broad, rather than in depth journey of exploration. On the other hand, museums are fundamental parts of the local education system. This includes traditional K-12 programs that schools frequently integrate as part of their classroom teaching. Other part-time programs seek to educate those that are so inclined. The ultimate aim of any museum is to teach visitors something that they did not previously know. It is for this reason that museums hire professional guides to talk to visitors, while others provide headphones so visitors can hear detailed explanations of the exhibition. In this way, museums provide venues for educators to deliver knowledge. In conclusion, we cannot deny that museums must be enjoyable at first glance as to entice the general population. However, museums are primarily a source of education, woven into the fabric of the traditional school system and as part of societal enrichment for individuals to further their knowledge and deepen their understanding of the world around them.
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should be a venue for entertainment or
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. While there are certain benefits to partaking in
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exhibits and activities as pure entertainment,
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are at their core,
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facilities that seek to educate using more playful, interactive methods.

On one hand,
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at
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primary, urban attractions that seek to enrich the cultural landscape of the city. They display items that are of historical or cultural significance to the region.
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, history
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underline the historical roots that
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for better understanding of present societal frameworks. Arts
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highlight local artists and
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shows
that are monumental or influential to the local art scene. As
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many
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visitors
feel bored by
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framed lectures and walls of information,
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focus on making the process interactive,
ascetically
pleasing,
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immersing the
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in a broad,
rather
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On the other hand
,
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are fundamental parts of the local
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system. This includes traditional K-12 programs that schools
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inclined. The ultimate aim of any
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is to teach
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something that they did not previously know. It is
for this reason
that
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hire professional guides to talk to
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visitors
, while others provide headphones
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so
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visitors
can hear detailed explanations of the exhibition. In this way,
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provide venues for educators to deliver knowledge.

In conclusion
, we cannot deny that
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be enjoyable at
first
glance as to entice the general population.
However
,
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are
primarily
a source of
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, woven into the fabric of the traditional school system and as part of societal enrichment for individuals to
further
their knowledge and deepen their understanding of the world around them.
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IELTS essay Museums are for education

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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