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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements. v.5

The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. with these statements. v. 5
The internet is a wonderful tool that helps people to keep in touch with one another no matter the distance. However, I do feel it can be addictive sometimes. Progress usually brings some price, as they say, there are many who are concerned about the negative impact of the internet on daily lives. To start with, the internet has numerous benefits. Undoubtedly, the obvious benefit is the ability to connect with others seamlessly. The advent of it has made it pretty fast to stay in touch with friends and families despite being far apart. Through the use of social networking websites, such as Facebook, Vbox and snap chat to mention a few. Additionally, businesses and companies have also expanded their business line on a global level. With the power of Skype and video conference, Organizations can now communicate with their business counterparts in other countries. For example, this makes it possible for companies to close a deal without travelling out of their shore like it is done in the past. Nevertheless, development sometimes comes with a price. This convenience that the internet brought to people by just clicking a mouse and transactions is complete will make it difficult for people to escape working. Also, another drawback is that people are so addicted to some websites and this makes it unease for them to have real friends. They rather prefer having a virtual relationship with their social media friends. As a result of this, they become isolated to people around their close environment. To conclude, I totally agree that although there are clear benefits of the internet, there are also certain risks to be considered. However, I believe that this can be minimized id people are properly educated on the effective way to use it.
The internet is a wonderful tool that
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helps
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people
to
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keep
in touch with one another no matter the distance.
However
, I do feel it can be addictive
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sometimes
. Progress
usually
brings
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some
price, as they say, there are
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many
who
are concerned
about the
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negative
impact of the internet on daily
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lives
.

To
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start
with, the internet has numerous benefits.
Undoubtedly
, the obvious benefit is the ability to connect with others
seamlessly
. The advent of it has made it pretty
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fast
to stay in touch with friends and families despite being far apart. Through the
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use
of social networking websites, such as Facebook,
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Vbox
and snap chat to mention a few.
Additionally
, businesses and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
have
also
expanded their business line on a global level. With the power of Skype and video conference, Organizations can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
communicate with their business counterparts in other countries.
For example
, this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
it possible for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
to close a deal without travelling out of their shore like it
is done
in the past.

Nevertheless
, development
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sometimes
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comes
with a price. This convenience that the internet brought to
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people
by
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just
clicking a mouse and transactions is complete will
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make
it difficult for
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people
to escape working.
Also
, another drawback is that
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people
are
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so
addicted to
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some
websites and this
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makes
it unease for them to have real friends. They
rather
prefer having a virtual relationship with their social media friends.
As a result
of this, they become isolated to
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people
around their close environment.

To conclude
, I
totally
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agree
that although there are
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clear
benefits of the internet, there are
also
certain
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risks
to
be considered
.
However
, I believe that this can
be minimized
id
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people
are
properly
educated on the effective way to
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use
it.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. with these statements. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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