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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. v.11

The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. v. 11
In the modernised society advancement of technology has pertained new trends and it is being observed that various sources or modes of communication channel been evolved. Internet considered being one of the immense Innovative technologies. These avail people to connect with any part of the globe. The evolution of Internet makes each individual stay connected to their loved ones and also to socialise with different people from other parts of the world. These are more advantageous in day-to-day life and it had become one of the essences of human, which always stays connected rather isolated. Let's discuss the advantages of advancement in Internet technology and the impact which hooked the society. Firstly, the Internet is meant to be one of the important inventions where human ever evolved. Most argue that the internet is considered to be one of the main sources in today's world. This makes people collaborate each other not only officially, but also emotionally. To illustrate further, for official related tasks it makes associates share their ideas globally and prevail helping to be connected. With the use of Internet, an individual can stay connected with different cultures and with different people around the globe. Moreover, the internet has made life easier when compare historically. For example, in olden days, if any messages or information needs to be passed, the only mode was human; then evolved the post, telephone and now instance mode of connecting is through the internet. In addition to the above facts, it not only benefits officially, perhaps it stays connected emotionally. For instance, people who stay away from family and deputed outside the world can communicate with their family and chat video / audio based on the facility available through Internet. Alternatively, when compared to 10 years’ before trend, people can collaborate with same society and to a limited audience, but through Internet an individual can connect and socialise to any part of the Globe. These are one of the healthy ways of collaborating with different people around the globe. The impact has made enormous to communicate people and to learn different cultures and to understand the facts of each country. The Internet makes people create awareness of various globe threat diseases or any human illegal plans. For example, in recent days the globe threat disease Ebola which shaken the whole world, these has been reached various parts of the world and alert people to take immediate action to prevent the disease, this is believed to be with the help of Internet. People started posting alerts and preventive measures about the disease through social media through Internet. Alternatively, the Internet has numerous impacts which have been proven and obstructed the society. The internet is one of the deadliest sources which can affect one country's economy. There are various hacking and facts behind hackers that should be admitted. The human evils can be spread through the internet. In conclusion, socialising with people or not is individual's perspective. It resembles more of individual's characteristics rather than targeting the communication mode. The internet is one of the communication modes which facilitate to communicate globally in an efficient way rather than isolating with people. It is more of people's mindset than blaming on the technology. Most of the facts favour that the internet is most efficient way to socialise with people rather that impact.
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modernised
society advancement of
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technology
has pertained new trends and it is
being observed
that
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various
sources or
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modes
of communication channel
been evolved
. Internet considered being one of the immense Innovative
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technologies
. These avail
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people
to connect with any
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part
of the
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globe
. The evolution of Internet
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makes
each individual
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stay
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connected
to their
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loved
ones and
also
to
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socialise
with
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different
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people
from other
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parts
of the
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world
. These are more advantageous in day-to-day life and it had become one of the essences of
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human
, which always
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stays
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connected
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rather
isolated.
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Let
's discuss the advantages of advancement in Internet
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technology
and the
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impact
which hooked the society.

Firstly
, the Internet
is meant
to be one of the
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important
inventions where
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human
ever evolved. Most argue that the internet
is considered
to be one of the main sources in
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today
's
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world
.
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This
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makes
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people
collaborate each other not
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only
officially
,
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but
also
emotionally
. To illustrate
further
, for official related tasks it
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makes
associates share their
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ideas
globally and prevail helping to be
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connected
. With the
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use
of Internet, an individual can
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stay
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connected
with
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different
cultures and with
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different
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people
around the
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globe
.
Moreover
, the internet has made life easier when compare
historically
.
For example
, in olden days, if any messages or information needs to
be passed
, the
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only
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mode
was
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human
; then evolved the post, telephone and
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now
instance
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mode
of connecting is
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through
the internet.

In addition
to the above facts, it not
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only
benefits
officially
, perhaps it
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stays
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connected
emotionally
.
For instance
,
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people
who
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stay
away from family and deputed outside the
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world
can communicate with their family and chat video / audio based on the facility available
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through
Internet.
Alternatively
, when compared to 10 years’
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before
trend,
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people
can collaborate with same society and to a limited audience,
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but
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through
Internet an individual can connect and
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socialise
to any
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part
of the
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Globe
. These are one of the healthy ways of collaborating with
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different
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people
around the
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globe
. The
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impact
has made enormous to communicate
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people
and to learn
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different
cultures and to understand the facts of each country. The Internet
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makes
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people
create awareness of
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various
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globe
threat
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diseases
or any
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human
illegal plans.
For example
, in recent days the
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globe
threat
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disease
Ebola which shaken the whole
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world
,
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these has
been reached
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various
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parts
of the
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world
and alert
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people
to take immediate action to
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prevent
the
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disease
, this
is believed
to be with the
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help
of Internet.
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People
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started
posting alerts and preventive measures about the
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disease
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through
social media
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through
Internet.

Alternatively
, the Internet has numerous
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impacts
which have
been proven
and obstructed the society. The internet is one of the deadliest sources which can affect one country's economy. There are
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various
hacking and facts behind hackers that should
be admitted
. The
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human
evils can
be spread
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through
the internet.

In conclusion
,
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socialising
with
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people
or not is individual's perspective. It resembles more of individual's characteristics
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rather
than targeting the communication
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mode
. The internet is one of the communication
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modes
which facilitate to communicate globally
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in an efficient way
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rather
than isolating with
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people
. It is more of
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people
's mindset than blaming on the
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technology
. Most of the facts
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favour
that the internet is
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most
efficient way to
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socialise
with
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people
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rather
that
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impact
.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
84Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. v. 11

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
555 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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