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The increase use of air transport to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season is a positive development. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The increase use of air transport to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season is a positive development. v. 1
With the growth of aviation, many countries use this mode of transport to export fruit and vegetables to places where they are not in season or cannot be grown. I agree that this a positive development, and in this essay, I will support and explain this view. There are several reasons which show this is a positive development. Firstly, nowadays, people from many countries are able to enjoy a variety of foods which are not available in their region. For example, few countries import onions as they do not have suitable environment that is required for it to be grown. Additionally, local farmers are able to sell their product to far away from their native country and thus make more profit and have a higher standard of living. Transporting goods by air also help the economy of countries as they sell their products at a substantial price. Another reason can be that people do not have to worry about the food being fresh or healthy. This is because air transport takes up considerably less amount of time than any other mode of transport and therefore no chance of degradation of fruits and vegetables. For instance, the duration of flight time between China and London is only 7 hours, which is extremely low. In contrast, if any, other mode of transportation is used such as by road or sea, it would take a considerable amount of time and there is a possibility that vegetables or fruits being rotten. In conclusion, it is becoming increasingly common to export or import goods by air. I fully agree with the view that exporting vegetables or fruits to a place where it is not available is surely a positive development.
With the growth of aviation,
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countries
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use
this mode of transport to export
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fruit
and
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to places where they are not in season or cannot
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. I
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development, and in this essay, I will support and
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this view.

There are several reasons which
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positive
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Firstly
, nowadays,
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people
from
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many
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countries
are able to enjoy a variety of foods which are not available in their region.
For example
, few
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countries
import onions as they do not have suitable environment that
is required
for it to
be grown
.
Additionally
, local farmers are able to sell their product to far away from their native
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country
and
thus
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make
more profit and have a higher standard of living. Transporting
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goods
by air
also
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help
the economy of
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countries
as they sell their products at a substantial price.

Another reason can be that
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people
do not
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worry about the food being fresh or healthy. This is
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because
air transport takes up
considerably
less amount of time than any other mode of transport and
therefore
no chance of degradation of
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fruits
and
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vegetables
.
For instance
, the duration of flight time between China and London is
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only
7 hours, which is
extremely
low.
In contrast
, if any, other mode of transportation is
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used
such as by road or sea, it would take a considerable amount of time and there is a possibility that
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vegetables
or
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fruits
being rotten.

In conclusion
, it is becoming
increasingly
common to export or import
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goods
by air. I
fully
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agree
with the view that exporting
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vegetables
or
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fruits
to a place where it is not available is
surely
a
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positive
development.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay The increase use of air transport to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season is a positive development. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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