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The incident that happened in class today

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The incident occured in the fFourth fForm home room on 30 May 2020. The event took place with Paul Ssmith and Andrew Cambell at the center of it. Mr. Miller left the Science laboratory to attend to a parent at the office during this period. Paul Smith and Andrew Cambell decided to roll up pieces of paper into a ball. They threw this ball at one another until Andrew did notn't catch the ball, causing it to hit and subsequently destroy a set of beakers. After Mr. Miller was finished with the parent he returned to the classroom and started to ask about the broken beakers but no one responded. He then asked us to clean up the mess and he informed the classAndrew and Paul that their parents would be contacted. . . I strongly urge you to address this matter either by suspending these boys or issuing demerits in order to punish their reckless behaviour.
The incident
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home room on 30 May 2020. The
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took place with Paul
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Ssmith
and Andrew
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Cambell
at the center of it.

Mr. Miller
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left
the Science laboratory to attend to a parent at the office during this period. Paul Smith and Andrew
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Cambell
decided to roll up pieces of paper into a ball. They threw this ball at one another until Andrew did
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't catch the ball, causing it to hit and
subsequently
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destroy
a set of beakers. After Mr. Miller
was finished
with the parent he returned to the classroom and
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started
to ask about the broken beakers
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but
no one responded. He then asked us to clean up the
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mess and
he informed the
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classAndrew
and Paul that their parents would
be contacted
.
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I
strongly
urge you to address this matter either by suspending these boys or issuing demerits in order to punish their reckless
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behaviour
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IELTS essay The incident that happened in class today

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
157 words
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