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The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The below image shows how the mobile phone has evolved from its early design towards a modern looking phone. And it is clearly visible that how the modern day mobile has more updated features list to that of the traditional mobile phones. First on the build of the phone, the old phones used to be bigger in all aspects with the dimensions of 130 mm length, 50 mm in width and weighing around 150g and there is long antenna up on the top and ear phone is quite big too. Despite having all the features of the conventional mobile phone the newer generation phone has a much more smaller footprint and a refreshing design. In comparison with the old phones the length and width of phones is less by 40 mm and 10 mm respectively with the weights reduced by more than half. On the features front the earlier version of the phone has only the basic features such as an black and white display, a keyboard, and a funtion key for navigating. On the other hand the newer generations has a full colour display, camera with ability to record video and also provides extra functions that enable to access e-mails and internet along with a music player and multiplayer gaming support. From this it is quite evident the mobile phone technology has developed a lot from its predecessor.
The below image
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how the mobile
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phone
has evolved from its early design towards a modern looking
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phone
. And it is
clearly
visible that how the modern day mobile has more updated features list to that of the traditional mobile phones.

First
on the build of the
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phone
, the
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old
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phones
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used
to be bigger in all aspects with the dimensions of 130 mm length, 50 mm in width and weighing around 150g and there is long antenna up on the top and ear
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phone
is quite
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big
too. Despite having all the features of the conventional mobile
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phone
the newer generation
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phone
has a much
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more smaller
footprint and a refreshing design.
In comparison
with the
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old
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phones
the length and width of
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phones
is less by 40 mm and 10 mm
respectively
with the weights
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reduced
by more than half.

On the features front the earlier version of the
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phone
has
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only
the basic features such as
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an
black and white display, a keyboard, and a
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funtion
key for navigating.

On the other hand
the newer generations has a full
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colour
display, camera with ability to record video and
also
provides extra functions that enable to access e-mails and internet along with a music player and multiplayer gaming support.

From this it is quite evident the mobile
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phone
technology has developed a lot from its predecessor.
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IELTS essay The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone.

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