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The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone. lj81o
The figure depicts two stages in the advancement of technology of cell phones. overall, we can see the very usual old model having very less features on the contrary we can see the new model with advanced specifications. The old model is basically 130mm in length and 50mm in breadth. It has black and white display however keyboard has 15 keys with one function selecting key in the center. The new model is comparatively lighter having almost half the weight and key pad is longer and slimmer with lots of digits for various functionalities. it has full color display with many additional features like camera with video recording, internet, music player, multi player games etc however both have earphone on top for clear audio. All in all, i would say contemporary mobile phones are much thinner and light besides having other facilities it somehow outraced early phones which are not much attractive and doesn't provide other necessities. Besides this camera and video facilities are unavailable which cant be inevitable.
The figure depicts two stages in the advancement of technology of cell phones.

overall
, we can
see
the
very
usual
old
model
having
very
less
features
on the contrary
we can
see
the new
model
with advanced specifications.

The
old
model
is
basically
130mm
in length and
50mm
in breadth. It has black and white display
however
keyboard has 15 keys with one function selecting key in the center.

The new
model
is
comparatively
lighter having almost half the weight and key pad is longer and slimmer with lots of digits for various functionalities.
it
has full color display with
many
additional features like camera with video recording, internet, music player, multi player games etc
however
both have earphone on top for
clear
audio.

All in all,
i
would say contemporary mobile phones are much thinner and light
besides
having other facilities it somehow outraced early phones which are not much attractive and doesn't provide other necessities.
Besides
this camera and video facilities are unavailable which
cant
be inevitable.
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IELTS essay The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone.

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