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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone. GDVo
This picture shows two generations of mobile phone. It is clear from the picture there are huge changes and developing happened. According to what is shown, that the modren mobile phones have extra functions that it could does, like electronic-mail, the internet connection, music player, multi-player games and camera and video capability. Also we full-coloured screen or even touch screen for some high cost mobile phones. Additionally, we reduce the lenghtness to 90mm vertically and 40mm horizonally. And another reduce in wieght to just 70g. Also there is more clear sound by the new earphone. It also has more compicated keyboard with letters and some simple functions. While, the old generation was have limited functions and black and white screen. Also it has more lenghtness by 130 vertically and 50mm horizonally. Additionally, simple keyboard and slightly more wight by 150g. It also has old earphone was not give us perfect sound. To sum up, we could say that there are a lot of development and changing happened, and almost the whole phone has changed except some original bases.
This picture
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shows
two generations of mobile
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phone
. It is
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clear
from the picture there are huge
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changes
and developing happened.

According to what
is shown
, that the
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modren
mobile
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phones
have extra functions that it could
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does
, like electronic-mail, the internet connection, music player, multi-player games and camera and video capability.
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Also
we
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full-coloured
screen or even touch screen for
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some
high cost mobile
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phones
.
Additionally
, we
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reduce
the
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lenghtness
to
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90mm
vertically
and
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40mm
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horizonally
. And another
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reduce
in
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wieght
to
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just
70g.
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Also
there is more
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clear
sound by the new earphone. It
also
has more
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compicated
keyboard with letters and
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some
simple functions.

While, the
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old
generation was
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have
limited functions and black and white screen.
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Also
it has more
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lenghtness
by 130
vertically
and
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50mm
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horizonally
.
Additionally
, simple keyboard and
slightly
more wight by 150g. It
also
has
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old
earphone was not give us perfect sound.

To sum up, we could say that there are
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a lot of
development and changing happened, and almost the whole
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phone
has
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changed
except
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some
original bases.
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IELTS essay The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
178 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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