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The illustration represents the stages how smoked fish are prepared commercially.

The illustration represents the stages how smoked fish are prepared commercially. 1n2NW
The illustration represents the stages how smoked fish are prepared commercially. It is clear that ten steps are involved in the process of making smoked fish. To commencing with Catching of fish from water and ends with distribution of smoked fish boxes for sale. To commence with first step of making smoked fish, fish are caught by fisherman using nets. Following this, fish are frozen and thawed. After that, fish are kept in fresh water for 5 minute. In the next stage, Fish are cut open. After cutting the fish, all cut fish kept into vessal, which contain salt water with yellow coluring for 30 minutes. Moving futher towards the remaining steps, fish are kept in container for smoked. After smoking, the fish are packed. Finally, paked fish sent to a cold storage and smoked boxes are distributed to supermarkets for sale.
The illustration represents the stages how
smoked
fish
are prepared
commercially
. It is
clear
that ten steps
are involved
in the process of making
smoked
fish. To commencing with Catching of fish from water and ends with distribution of
smoked
fish boxes for sale.

To commence with
first
step of making
smoked
fish, fish
are caught
by fisherman using nets. Following this, fish
are frozen
and thawed. After that, fish are
kept
in fresh water for 5 minute. In the
next
stage, Fish are
cut
open. After cutting the fish, all
cut
fish
kept
into
vessal
, which contain salt water with yellow
coluring
for 30 minutes.

Moving
futher
towards the remaining steps, fish are
kept
in container for
smoked
. After smoking, the fish
are packed
.

Finally
,
paked
fish
sent
to a
cold
storage and
smoked
boxes
are distributed
to supermarkets for sale.
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IELTS essay The illustration represents the stages how smoked fish are prepared commercially.

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