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anything good but it change bad if do too much NMXNb
In model life today, there are a lot of things that necessary for the life of people. Many activities are very useful and it are brought benefits to everyone but others think that somethings will be worth if they did it so much. This essay totally agrees with this view. Firstly, it will say about foods for the life of people secondly, that is education for children. From the beginning, foods were the most importance things that necessary for the life of human every day. It gives energy for people that they can survive day by day. However, if eating so much foods become a behavior, it will make them overweight. That thing will affect bad to their health in the future. For example, American is a developed country where have a lot of overweight people because they eat fast foods so much every day. In addition, study too much also become a problem with teenagers. All of people have to go to school to get knowledge, that is very important and necessary. But there are some parents want their children to become successful person early. As the result, all of them burnout with their studying, even few of them feel stress with their life. For instance, following with checking of WHO, Japan is the country where have percentage of young people always feel stress and want to kill themselves because they have to studying and work too much every day. In conclusion, all things that people do and develop is very important for model life. Whatever they do is necessary for their life but it will be become better if they know what is enough even eat or study.
In model
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life
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today
, there are
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a lot of
things that
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necessary
for the
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life
of
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people
.
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activities are
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very
useful and it
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are
brought benefits to everyone
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but
others
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think
that somethings will be worth if they did it
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so
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much
. This essay
totally
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agrees
with this view.
Firstly
, it will say about
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foods
for the
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life
of
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people
secondly
,
that is
education for children.

From the beginning,
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foods
were the most importance things that
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necessary
for the
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life
of human every day. It gives energy for
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people
that they can survive day by day.
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, if eating
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so
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much
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foods
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become
a behavior, it will
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make
them overweight. That thing will affect
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bad
to their health in the future.
For example
, American is a
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developed country
where have
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a lot of
overweight
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people
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because
they eat
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fast
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foods
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so
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much
every day.

In addition
, study too
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much
also
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become
a problem with
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teenagers
. All of
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people
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have to
go to school to
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get
knowledge,
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very
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important
and
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necessary
.
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there are
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some
parents want their children to
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become
successful person early. As the result, all of them burnout with their studying, even few of them feel
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stress
with their
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life
.
For instance
, following with checking of
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WHO
, Japan is the country where have percentage of young
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people
always feel
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stress
and want to kill themselves
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because
they
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have to
studying and work too
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much
every day.

In conclusion
, all things that
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people
do and develop is
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very
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important
for model
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life
. Whatever they do is
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necessary
for their
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life
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but
it will be
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become
better if they know what is
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enough
even eat or study.
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IELTS essay anything good but it change bad if do too much

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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