Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The idea hit me like a tornado

The idea hit me like a tornado le72W
Writing an essay is not an easy task, never was, at least for me. When I were given an assignment to do as my homework, I was very upset as it was a long time since I had written one. My instructor gave me many options and it became even more tough for me to choose one. Then, I chose the topic which was, why are crime dramas so popular? I came up with many ideas in the beginning, but as soon as I wrote just 5 lines, I turned short-handed. After this, I had to search this topic on Google. But on google, there were numerous websites which were suggesting me to different ideas and I couldn't find any relevant ideas. Then I just started thinking of the topic and found many examples from my daily life but none the examples were able to be elaborated in a professional essay writing. I felt very sad at that time. When I was noting down this moment in my daily diary, an idea blown out my mind. I realised that this whole incident can also be written in an alternative topic from the list which was, the idea hit me like a tornado. I quickly opened MS Word to copy down the same. Luckily, on counting the total words, the length was enough for the assignment. But really, writing an incident as an essay was an amazing idea.
Writing an essay is not an easy task, never was, at least for me. When I
Did you mean "was"?
were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
an assignment to do as my homework, I was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
upset as it was a long time since I had written one. My instructor gave me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
options and it became even more tough for me to choose one. Then, I chose the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
topic
which was, why are crime dramas
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
popular?

I came up with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ideas
in the beginning,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as I wrote
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
5 lines, I turned short-handed. After this, I had to search this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
topic
on Google.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
on google, there were numerous websites which were suggesting me to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ideas
and I couldn't find any relevant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ideas
. Then I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
thinking of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
topic
and found
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
examples from my daily life
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
none the examples were able to
be elaborated
in a professional essay writing. I felt
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
sad at that time. When I was noting down this moment in my daily diary, an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
idea
blown out my mind. I
Possible spelling mistake. 'realised' is British English.
realised
that this whole incident can
also
be written
in an alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
topic
from the list which was, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
idea
hit me like a tornado. I
quickly
opened MS Word to copy down the same. Luckily, on counting the total words, the length was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
for the assignment.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
really
, writing an incident as an essay was an amazing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
idea
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay The idea hit me like a tornado

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
237 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 5.5band
    Schools should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
    Although in today's era study is more important in our life then other non academic activities, but however I strongly agree that school must prepare student for non-academic asspects because life is not all about getting good marks and been top at the class. So as a student point of view achivin...
  • 5.5band
    exams and tests in schools
    Tests or exams basically made to measure student information about given subject. Lots of schools and universities even multiple different license centers requires a minimum amount of information for passing. There are a lot of types for testing for example clinical test, theoretical test, and pract...
  • 6.5band
    Government should introduce healthcare which prevents illness rather than curing it.
    Many people believe that the government should take various steps to provide health care and ensure citizens' health. In my opinion, I strongly agree that it is better that government propose public health programs for disease prevention rather than treatment. One of the major advantages of prevent...
  • 5.5band
    Computer national Mones are Very popular for all and Parenty think this has little educational and will be harmul from childrees
    In Contemporary era, for certain people games only refers to computer game. Physical activity on games are Verge to get only in memories Enthusiasm of online games became eminent for all age group. Parents are concern about Educational Value from games. I concede above assertion to major extent reas...
  • 6band
    Advantages and disadvantages taking vaccine
    These days, there is on ongoing debate about people taking vaccine or not. While it is possible to claim that taking different vaccine for our healthy. Some people belive that it has good benefits while others think it gives us bad results. In this essay I will explain my point of view by analyzing ...
  • 5.5band
    some people feel advertising is succesful
    Some people feel advertising is successful, but some don’t pay attetion to it. What is the difference between these two? In this section, I am going to write about advertising based on my own opinion. First of all is whether advertising is effecting our decision to buy things. In this paragraph, I ...