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The high rate of drug consumption is a major threat for the mankind what are the reason and how it can be reduced.

The high rate of drug consumption is a major threat for the mankind what are the reason and how it can be reduced. J3QGe
Nowadays drugs become a major cause of misleading youth which effect individuals by various ways band symptoms. The main scene behind this is lack of knowledge and bad surrounding connections which, I discuss with relevant issues and will explain the point for takle this theart in upcoming fractions. To begin with, in the current time era the modern youth want to become independent which the people thaught it is a best way to take decisions by ownself. To explicate it, generation of current time period will exacerbate with drug using which effected their self by numerous ways. For example, many of the studies revealed that the usage of narcotic drugs' was took 40% people life in Russia which effect masses career or future and spoiled the opportunities to succeed. As a result, the people got attracted in drugs by songs as well as through the social media. Although the effects of drugs will vanished life of people but the solutions will also help to tackle with this serious problem. First of all, law makers should established new laws strictly which might be related to banning drugs and harmful pills. Secondly, government should charge that responsibility on sports clubs and education authorities which promote and aware mankind from this serious issue. To conclude, the awareness of health and joining of health clubs will become a suitable way for tackling with plethora of drug effects which increase the rate of mortality rate all over the world.
Nowadays
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drugs
become a major cause of misleading youth which
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effect
individuals by various
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ways
band symptoms. The main scene behind this is lack of knowledge and
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bad
surrounding connections which, I discuss with relevant issues and will
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explain
the point for
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takle
this
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theart
in upcoming fractions. To
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begin
with, in the
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current
time era the modern youth want to become independent which the
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people
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thaught
it is
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a
best
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way
to take decisions by
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ownself
. To explicate it, generation of
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current
time period will exacerbate with
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drug
using which effected their self by numerous
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ways
.
For example
,
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many
of the studies revealed that the usage of narcotic drugs' was
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took
40%
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people
life in Russia which
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effect
masses career or future and spoiled the opportunities to succeed.
As a result
, the
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people
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got
attracted in
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drugs
by songs
as well
as through the social media. Although the effects of
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drugs
will vanished life of
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people
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but
the solutions will
also
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help
to tackle with this serious problem.
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First of all
, law makers should
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established
new laws
strictly
which might
be related
to banning
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drugs
and harmful pills.
Secondly
,
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government
should charge that responsibility on sports clubs and education authorities which promote and aware mankind from this serious issue.
To conclude
, the awareness of health and joining of health clubs will become a suitable
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way
for tackling with plethora of
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drug
effects which increase the rate of mortality rate all over the world.
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IELTS essay The high rate of drug consumption is a major threat for the mankind what are the reason and how it can be reduced.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
244 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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