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The Diagram Shows How Chocolate Is Produced.

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A glance at the given diagrams illustrates the process of making chocolate from cocoa. Overall, it is obvious that there are ten prominent stages in this process: ripe red pods on a cacao tree and culminating with chocolate products. In the beginning, cocoa comes from cacao trees grown in South America, Africa, Indonesia. When the pods are ripe and red, they are harvested and white cocoa beans are removed. These beans are used to be fermented. Subsequently, people spread them in sun to dry them. Next, they are put in large sacks and transported by train or lorry to take to the factory. They are roasted at 350C. The next step is that beans are crushed and eliminated outer shell. Coming to the final stage of the process, the inner part that is left is pressed and the chocolate is produced.
A glance at the
given
diagrams illustrates the process of making chocolate from cocoa.
Overall
, it is obvious that there are ten prominent stages in this process: ripe red pods on a cacao tree and culminating with chocolate products.

In the beginning, cocoa
comes
from cacao trees grown in South America, Africa, Indonesia. When the pods are ripe and red, they
are harvested
and white cocoa beans
are removed
. These beans are
used
to
be fermented
.
Subsequently
,
people
spread them in sun to dry them.
Next
, they
are put
in large sacks and transported by train or lorry to take to the factory. They
are roasted
at 350C. The
next
step is that beans
are crushed
and eliminated outer shell. Coming to the final stage of the process, the inner part
that is
left
is pressed
and the chocolate
is produced
.
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IELTS essay The Diagram Shows How Chocolate Is Produced.

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