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Wolves in Yellowstone ParkThanks to a controversial but very successful reintroduction program, wolves are now in Yellowstone again after an absence of almost 70 years. These wolves had been hunted to near extinction on the North American continent. Sever v.1

Wolves in Yellowstone ParkThanks to a controversial but very successful reintroduction program, wolves are now in Yellowstone again after an absence of almost 70 years. These wolves had been hunted to near extinction on the North American continent. Sever v. 1
Due to tourism, several historical buildings and locations have been damaged. This essay will discuss ways to prevent further destruction of historical constructions and sites. One of the ways to curb increasing destruction of vintage buildings and locations is to make them tourist centres. A major mistake of residents of a place is the feeling that erecting new edifices and creating artificial locations are ways to attract tourist. In my opinion, existing structures and places can also serve as sources of attraction for tourist. For example, the Idanre hill which most foreigners visit when they arrive Nigeria was created by nature; if the natives of Idanre had destroyed this monument, they may never have known the benefits of it. Another way to reduce the destruction of the pride of our ancestors is to encourage our citizens to appreciate their natural environment. This includes mountains, rocks and even the famous evil forest. If the people are taught to appreciate the environment they live in and the topographic features of the land, they will never think of destroying them. Rather, they would invite their foreign friends to admire them. For example, I was brought up to appreciate the value of the coral bead. My mother also told me that they were won only by the royal family in the past. Hence, it was not a surprise that I wore these beads proudly during a cultural show while I was studying in the United Kingdom. To conclude, the best ways to protect the heritage of our ancestor and historical places, is to educate people on the values of these places. In addition, efforts should be made to clean up these areas and monuments to attract visitors.
Due to tourism, several historical buildings and locations have
been damaged
. This essay will discuss
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ways
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
further
destruction of historical constructions and sites.

One of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ways
to curb increasing destruction of vintage buildings and locations is to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them tourist
Possible spelling mistake. 'centres' is British English.
centres
. A major mistake of residents of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
is the feeling that erecting new edifices and creating artificial locations are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ways
to attract tourist. In my opinion, existing structures and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
can
also
serve as sources of attraction for tourist.
For example
, the
Possible spelling mistake found.
Idanre
hill which most foreigners visit when they
Did you mean "arrive in" or "arrive at"?
arrive
Nigeria
was created
by nature; if the natives of
Possible spelling mistake found.
Idanre
had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroyed
this monument, they may never have known the benefits of it.

Another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
way
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the destruction of the pride of our ancestors is to encourage our citizens to appreciate their natural environment. This includes mountains, rocks and even the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
evil forest. If the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are taught
to appreciate the environment they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in and the topographic features of the land, they will never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
of destroying them.
Rather
, they would invite their foreign friends to admire them.
For example
, I
was brought
up to appreciate the value of the coral bead. My mother
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
me that they
were won
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
by the royal family in the past.
Hence
, it was not a surprise that I wore these beads
proudly
during a cultural
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
while I was studying in the United Kingdom.

To conclude
, the best
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ways
to protect the heritage of our ancestor and historical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
, is to educate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
on the values of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
.
In addition
, efforts should
be made
to clean up these areas and monuments to attract visitors.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Wolves in Yellowstone ParkThanks to a controversial but very successful reintroduction program, wolves are now in Yellowstone again after an absence of almost 70 years. These wolves had been hunted to near extinction on the North American continent. Sever v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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