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The growth of the online shopping will one day lead to the closure of shopping stores in cities. Do you agree or disagree with this.

The growth of the online shopping will one day lead to the closure of shopping stores in cities. with this. OEVVd
Nowadays internet is a ongoing trend. people using internet to fulfill their personal needs such as shopping, entertainment and GPS etc. However, some people use internet for online shopping while other people go to physically to the shopping stores. Well, I consider a online shopping instead of going to shopping stores. According to the survey there are alot of websites that offers you a online shopping aspect every brand have their own websites. even consequently, you can save your time due to heavy traffic. For instance, i live in a busy city so here is difficult to travel one side to the other side of the city due to high traffic so that’s why online shopping will one day lead to the closure of shopping in stores. Furthermore, you can search variety of products in just one click. By way of illustration, you can search a website and you see alot of products with variety of themes such as color, size etc. On the contrary, you do not need to go anywhere to buy a variety of products. On the other hand, people go to the shopping stores because they cannot be satisfy themselves from online shopping. On the contrary, people cannot recieved a quality of products. For instance, if you buying something online so there are alot of people who expose themselves to spans and other low quality issues. Moreover, thats why people choose to going to shopping stores as compared to buying online. In conclusion, the growth of the online shopping will one day expended instead of shopping stores in cities. that’s why i agree with online shopping
Nowadays internet is
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a
ongoing trend.
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people
using internet to fulfill their personal needs such as
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shopping
, entertainment and GPS etc.
However
,
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some
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people
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use
internet for
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online
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shopping
while
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other
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people
go to
physically
to the
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shopping
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stores
. Well, I consider
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a
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online
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shopping
instead
of going to
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shopping
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stores
. According to the survey there
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are alot
of websites that offers you
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a
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online
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shopping
aspect every brand have their
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own
websites.
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even
consequently
, you can save your time due to heavy traffic.
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,
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i
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live
in a busy city
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here is difficult to travel one side to the
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other
side of the city due to high traffic
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so
that’s why
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online
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shopping
will one day lead to the closure of
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in
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stores
.
Furthermore
, you can search variety of
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products
in
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just
one click. By way of illustration, you can search a website and you
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see
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alot
of
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products
with variety of themes such as color, size etc.
On the contrary
, you do not need to go anywhere to
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buy
a variety of
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products
. On the
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other
hand,
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people
go to the
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shopping
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stores
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because
they cannot be
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themselves from
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.
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the contrary,
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cannot
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recieved
a quality of
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products
.
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, if
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you buying
something
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there
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are alot
of
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people
who expose themselves to spans and
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other
low quality issues.
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,
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why
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people
choose to going to
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stores
as compared to buying
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online
.
In conclusion
, the growth of the
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online
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shopping
will one day expended
instead
of
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stores
in cities.
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that
’s why
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i
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shopping
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IELTS essay The growth of the online shopping will one day lead to the closure of shopping stores in cities. with this.

Essay
  American English
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269 words
5.5
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