Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. RO6o
Now-a-days, online shopping is increasingly popular among the people. Shops in countries could lead to closure because of tremendous growth of digit shopping. This essay will argue why shops in towns and cities are an absolute necessary and they can not be replaced by online shopping. Modern way of online shopping has numerious benefits. Firstly, people can shop literally everything by sitting in a place, just by single click which saves their time and energy. Who would prefer commuting in a heavy traffic on one's busy schedule? Example: Amazon provides way for online shopping for groceries, outfits for humans/pets, traditional herbal drink etc. Additionally, digital shopping provides huge offers to their customers which is really beneficial for end users. For instance, Flipkart offers dry fruits, oil etc for Re 1 when one has total purchase of Rs. 600 or above. To sum up, people can save time and energy and also avail good offers through online shopping. Although online shopping has it's own benefits, traditional mode of shopping completely preposterous. Firstly, people prefer shopping at nearby shops during emergency situation/when they run out of time. For instance, when a person is sick, one would obviosuly prefer to get medicines/herbal drinks from the medical shop which is situated in and around one's residancy. Secondly, through visiting shops in person, people can purchase the products according to their excact expectations. Example, one can buy a food product by looking at the expiry date/ one can choose dress with trail provided in the shop. To conclude, shops in towns and cities are must for people during the emergency time and it also provides a pleasure of touch and feel shopping. In conclusion, this essay has argued why physical stores are completely essential and they can not be replaced by online shopping. In my opinion, stores in neighborhood or in cities can not be replaced by digital method since they provide pleasurable shopping experience and they help people during emergency situations.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
-a-days,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
is
increasingly
popular among the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Shops
in countries could lead to closure
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of tremendous growth of digit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
. This essay will argue why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shops
in towns and cities are an absolute
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
necessary and
they can not
be replaced
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
shopping.

Modern way of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
has
Possible spelling mistake found.
numerious
benefits.
Firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
literally
everything by sitting in a place,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
by single click which saves their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
and energy. Who would prefer commuting in
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "heavy traffic".
a heavy traffic
on one's busy schedule? Example: Amazon
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
provides
way for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
for groceries, outfits for humans/pets, traditional herbal drink etc.
Additionally
, digital
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
provides
huge offers to their customers which is
really
beneficial for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
users.
For instance
, Flipkart offers dry fruits, oil etc for Re 1 when one has total
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
of Rs. 600 or above. To sum up,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can save
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
and energy and
also
avail
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
offers through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
shopping.

Although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
has
Did you mean "its" (possessive pronoun) instead of 'it's' (=it is)?
it's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
benefits, traditional mode of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
completely preposterous.
Firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
prefer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
at nearby
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shops
during emergency situation/when they run out of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
.
For instance
, when a person is sick, one would
Possible spelling mistake found.
obviosuly
prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
medicines/herbal drinks from the medical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
which
is situated
in and around one's
Possible spelling mistake found.
residancy
.
Secondly
, through visiting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shops
in person,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
the products according to their
Possible spelling mistake found.
excact
expectations. Example, one can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a food product by looking at the expiry date/ one can choose dress with trail provided in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
.
To conclude
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shops
in towns and cities are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
during the emergency
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
and it
also
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
provides
a pleasure of touch and feel shopping.

In conclusion
, this essay has argued why physical stores are completely
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
essential and
they can not
be replaced
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
. In my opinion, stores in neighborhood or in cities can not
be replaced
by digital method since they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
provide
pleasurable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
experience and
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
during emergency situations.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts