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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? wR0e
In recent day, migrating to the metropolis in earning a better life has become a publicity recognized phenomenon. Although there are some drawbacks of migrating to cities, the government could do much more to ensure the urban condition for citizens. On the one hand, it is true that movement from the countryside causes several problems and put pressure on the large cities. First, the cost of living is likely to be much higher than that of a small town or village as citizens have to pay more for transport, housing or even food. Second, by increasing population day in day out, cities witness a higher level of social evils such as crime and poverty rate. Moreover, migrating is at the expense of the environment, especially air pollution from a machine’s processing and garbage from human activities. For instance, Bangkok, the capital city in Thailand, recently are suffering from the toxin in the atmosphere due to the burden from the rising in the number of immigrants. On the other hand, the government should take steps to measure these problems to ensure that people have the chance to enjoy a better life. First, if the government invest more in the infrastructure of affordable and social housing, the poorer can benefits from reducing the cost of living. In addition, in order to protect cities’ environment, authorities would enact laws to ban the vehicles in center cities and promote the usage of public transport systems to deal with air pollution and traffic congestion. Another solution is that the government could relocate the buildings including offices, schools or hospitals from urban to rural areas. In facts, nowadays, many universities with thousands of students are being moved to the suburb, far away from the center, which helps to reduce the major pressure of large city. In conclusion, migrating brings a lot of extremely difficult to the metropolis either material or immaterial aspects. However, governments could implement various measurements to tackle these problems. Votes
In recent day,
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migrating
to the metropolis in earning a better life has become a publicity recognized phenomenon. Although there are
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some
drawbacks of
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migrating
to
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cities
, the
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government
could do much more to ensure the urban condition for citizens. On the one hand, it is true that movement from the countryside causes several problems and put pressure on the large
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
.
First
, the cost of living is likely to be much higher than that of a
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small
town or village as citizens
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have to
pay more for transport, housing or even food. Second, by increasing population day in day out,
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cities
witness a higher level of social evils such as crime and poverty rate.
Moreover
,
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migrating
is at the expense of the environment,
especially
air pollution from a machine’s processing and garbage from human activities.
For instance
, Bangkok, the capital city in Thailand, recently are suffering from the toxin in the atmosphere due to the burden from the rising in the number of immigrants.

On the other hand
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should take steps to measure these problems to ensure that
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people
have the chance to enjoy a better life.
First
, if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
invest more in the infrastructure of affordable and social housing, the poorer can benefits from reducing the cost of living.
In addition
, in order to protect
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cities’
environment, authorities would enact laws to ban the vehicles in center
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
and promote the usage of public transport systems to deal with air pollution and traffic congestion. Another solution is that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
could relocate the buildings including offices, schools or hospitals from urban to rural areas. In facts, nowadays,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
universities with thousands of students are being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
to the suburb, far away from the center, which
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helps
to
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reduce
the major pressure of large city.

In conclusion
,
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migrating
brings
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a lot of
extremely
difficult to the metropolis either material or immaterial aspects.
However
,
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governments
could implement various measurements to tackle these problems.

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IELTS essay More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

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326 words
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