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Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. EO5r
It is often argued that media should not showcase personal lives of any politicians. A quite debatable topic is whether magazines or newspapers should interfere into the private life of political leaders. This essay will argue why it is absolutely important to showcase their personal life as it shows the struggle behind the success and also reveals the true picture. Although media always portray the darker side of the politicians, it is extremely necessary to show the real life battle to gain the success. Many teenagers tend to blindly follow these celebrities and chose the wrong path to become popular. However, if media exhibits the true hard work, it will guide the youngsters to remain on the correct path. For example, a child idolizing Subhash Chandra Bose, will not be like him unless he/she studies about know he became such a great politician. Hence, newspapers and magazines play a very crucial role to bring the out the truth. Furthermore, political leaders are the face of the country. Because general public vote their leaders with a hope that these leaders will serve them, it is important that they are aware of the actual character of the politician. If media publicizes their personal life, it gives a clear picture on the character of the person. Many instances have come out in media where politicians are promoting Women Empowerment but have actually been caught for domestic violence at their home. Due to these factors, it is necessary to showcase the private life of the ministers. In the conclusion, this essay argued that in order to reveal the true image of a political leader and share the struggle of his success, it is crucial that media should publicly show their privacy and bring out the truth. Moreover, a politician who is a representative of the general public needs to be transparent in every aspect of life.
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argued that
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media
should not showcase personal
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lives
of any
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politicians
. A quite debatable topic is whether magazines or newspapers should interfere into the private
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life
of political
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leaders
. This essay will argue why it is
absolutely
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important
to showcase their personal
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life
as it
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shows
the struggle behind the success and
also
reveals the true picture.

Although
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media
always portray the darker side of the
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politicians
, it is
extremely
necessary to
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show
the real
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life
battle to gain the success.
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Many
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teenagers
tend to
blindly
follow these celebrities and chose the
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wrong
path to become popular.
However
, if
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media
exhibits the true
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hard
work, it will guide the youngsters to remain on the correct path.
For example
, a child idolizing
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Subhash
Chandra Bose, will not be like him unless he/she studies about know he became such a great
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politician
.
Hence
, newspapers and magazines play a
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very
crucial role to bring the out the truth.

Furthermore
, political
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leaders
are the face of the country.
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Because
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general public
vote their
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leaders
with a hope that these
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leaders
will serve them, it is
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important
that they are aware of the actual character of the
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politician
. If
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media
publicizes their personal
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life
, it gives a
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clear
picture on the character of the person.
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Many
instances have
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come
out in
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media
where
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politicians
are promoting Women Empowerment
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but
have actually
been caught
for domestic violence at their home. Due to these factors, it is necessary to showcase the private
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life
of the ministers.

In the conclusion, this essay argued that in order to reveal the true image of a political
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leader
and share the struggle of his success, it is crucial that
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media
should
publicly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
their privacy and bring out the truth.
Moreover
, a
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politician
who is a representative of the
Consider using "public".
general public
needs to be transparent in every aspect of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
.
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IELTS essay Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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