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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. 6XyB
Now-a-days, online shopping are becoming popular and increasing rapidly. Some people think that increasing in number of online shopping will paves the way for closing of all shops in towns and cities. This essay will argue that even online shopping have good number of benefits but it will not lead to closure of all shops in and around cities and towns. There are many reasons why people like online shopping. Firstly, it save time and energy. One can easily order the products just by sitting in front of computer instead of commuting to long distance in heavy traffic. In addition, online shopping provides door-step delivery service if the bill exceeds certain amount. For instance, Amazon provides free door-step delivery if one's total order bill value is higher that Rs. 500. Secondly, online shopping gives good deals and discount on products during festive session and special days. For example, Flipkart comes with Big Billion day sales on every Republic day with attractive discounts. The above are the reason for popularity of online shopping in recent days. On other hand, despite the benefits of online shopping, traditional method of shopping will give immense pleasure and experience. Firstly, it is easy to compare products in hands by visiting shops and can get products immediately. In addition, while visiting shops one can feel the quality of products and can decide which one to choose. For instance, by visiting shop for dress purchase, one can easily feel the cloth quality and can use trail room to check the fitness of the cloth. Secondly, while purchasing food products one has to check the manufactured date and nutritional value and it may be easy when step in the shop. In conclusion, this essay argued why online shopping will not lead to closure of shops in towns and cities. In my opinion, despite the benefits of online shopping, many people still prefer to go shops which gives them good exposure on products.
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will
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paves
the way for closing of all
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shops
in towns and cities. This essay will argue that even
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online
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shopping
have
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good
number of benefits
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but
it will not lead to closure of all
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shops
in and around cities and towns.

There are
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many
reasons why
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people
like
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online
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shopping
.
Firstly
, it
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save
time and energy. One can
easily
order the
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products
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just
by sitting in front of computer
instead
of commuting to long distance in heavy traffic.
In addition
,
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online
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shopping
provides door-step delivery service if the bill exceeds certain amount.
For instance
, Amazon provides free door-step delivery if one's total order bill value is higher that Rs. 500.
Secondly
,
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online
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shopping
gives
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good
deals and discount on
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products
during festive session and special days.
For example
, Flipkart
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comes
with
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Big
Billion day sales on every Republic day with attractive discounts. The above are the reason for popularity of
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online
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shopping
in recent days.

On other hand, despite the benefits of
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online
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shopping
, traditional method of
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shopping
will give immense pleasure and experience.
Firstly
, it is easy to compare
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products
in hands by visiting
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shops
and can
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get
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products
immediately.
In addition
, while visiting
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shops
one can feel the quality of
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products
and can decide which one to choose.

For instance
, by visiting
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shop
for dress
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purchase
, one can
easily
feel the cloth quality and can
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use
trail room to
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check
the fitness of the cloth.
Secondly
, while purchasing food
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products
one
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has to
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check
the manufactured date and nutritional value and it may be easy when step in the shop.

In conclusion
, this essay argued why
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online
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shopping
will not lead to closure of
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shops
in towns and cities. In my opinion, despite the benefits of
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online
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shopping
,
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many
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people
still
prefer to go
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shops
which gives them
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good
exposure on
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products
.
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IELTS essay The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
324 words
6.5
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