Nowadays, the count of Overweight people is going high. It is often argued by some people that this problem can be taken care by impending more Physical education sessions in the Education system. I echo my thoughts with them, as it brings in more awareness in Individuals.
First and Foremost, People are becoming busier day by day with their packed schedule and is one of the main causes for the reduction in participating in the Physical activities. With less involvement in body movement, People are becoming heavier and heavier. Additionally, the consumption of Junk food and the use of Instant food, making the human body filled with unnecessary fats and cholesterols. Citizens should also keep in my mind that they are not only becoming a burden to themselves, but also straining the Health care system which will be run by the Government and with People's taxes.
Secondly, the problem of overweight can be handled by bringing a change in school curriculum by adding more physical education to improve student’s health. As per a saying, Prevention is better than Cure, it is better to control the weight in the early stages of life. It is a tough job to reduce the weight to an overweight person, and the weight reduction involves some health hazards. So, students must be brought to aware how health plays an important role in everyone's life.
To Conclude, People should become aware that health plays an important role in their lives and be cautious with their weight, and this can be achieved by introducing more physical training sessions to the students.
Nowadays, the count of Overweight
people
is going high. It is
often
argued by
some
people
that this problem can
be taken
care by impending more
Physical
education sessions in the Education system. I echo my thoughts with them, as it brings in more awareness in Individuals.
First
and Foremost,
People
are becoming busier day by day with their packed schedule and is one of the main causes for the reduction
in participating in
the
Physical
activities. With less involvement in body movement,
People
are becoming heavier and heavier.
Additionally
, the consumption of Junk food and the
use
of Instant food, making the human body filled with unnecessary fats and
cholesterols
. Citizens should
also
keep
in my mind that they are not
only
becoming a burden to themselves,
but
also
straining the
Health
care system which will
be run
by the
Government
and with
People
's taxes.
Secondly
, the problem of overweight can
be handled
by bringing a
change
in school curriculum by adding more
physical
education to
improve
student’s
health
. As per a saying, Prevention is better than Cure, it is better to control the
weight
in the early stages of life. It is a tough job to
reduce
the
weight
to an overweight person, and the
weight
reduction involves
some
health
hazards.
So
, students
must
be brought
to aware how
health
plays an
important
role in everyone's life.
To Conclude
,
People
should become aware that
health
plays an
important
role in their
lives
and be cautious with their
weight
, and this can
be achieved
by introducing more
physical
training sessions to the students.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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