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the graph shows goods transport in the UK(1974-2002) v.1

the graph shows goods transport in the UK(1974-2002) v. 1
The amount of goods transported by four separate modes of transport, namely road, water, rail and pipeline in the UK over a 28-year period from 1974 to 2002 is shown in the line graph, measured in million stones. Overall, the highest amount of goods was transported via roadway whereas pipeline remained the least commonly used mode of shipping over the entire period. Although there were some fluctuations, transport by road, water and pipeline showed an upward trend while/whereas transportation via rail reduced for a while before returning to the same levels. In 1974, around 70 million tonnes of goods were transported by road and this quantity rose to about 100 million tonnes towards the end of the span. Pipeline transported 5 million tonnes of goods in 1974. This figure increased steadily over the years and in 2002, about 20 million tonnes of goods were transported using this means. Both water and railways transported about 40 much tonnes of goods in 1974 and that capacity remained more or less the same over the next four years. Afterwards, transport by water ways rose, whereas transportation by railways declined. During the period from 1986 to 1994, waterways transported around 60 million tonnes of goods. This quantity declined to around 50 million tonnes in 1998 and rose to about 65 million tonnes over the next four years. By contrast, quantity of transportation by rail declined to 30 million tonnes in 1984 and showed fluctuations until 1998 before rising again to 40 million tonnes in 2002.
The amount of
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goods
transported by four separate modes of transport,
namely
road,
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water
, rail and pipeline in the UK
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over
a 28-year period from 1974 to 2002
is shown
in the line graph, measured in
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million
stones.

Overall
, the highest amount of
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goods
was transported
via roadway whereas pipeline remained the least
commonly
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used
mode of shipping
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over
the entire period. Although there were
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some
fluctuations, transport by road,
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water
and pipeline
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showed
an upward trend while/whereas transportation via rail
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reduced
for a while
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before
returning to the same levels. In 1974, around 70
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million
tonnes of
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goods
were transported
by road and this quantity rose to about 100
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million
tonnes towards the
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end
of the span.

Pipeline transported 5
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million
tonnes of
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goods
in 1974. This figure increased
steadily
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over
the years and in 2002, about 20
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million
tonnes of
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goods
were transported
using this means. Both
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water
and railways transported about 40
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much
tonnes of
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goods
in 1974 and that capacity remained more or less the same
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over
the
next
four years. Afterwards, transport by
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water
ways rose, whereas transportation by railways declined. During the period from 1986 to 1994, waterways transported around 60
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million
tonnes of
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goods
. This quantity declined to around 50
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million
tonnes in 1998 and rose to about 65
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million
tonnes
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over
the
next
four years.

By contrast, quantity of transportation by rail declined to 30
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million
tonnes in 1984 and
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showed
fluctuations until 1998
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before
rising again to 40
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million
tonnes in 2002.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay the graph shows goods transport in the UK(1974-2002) v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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