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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different mode of transport. v.2

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different mode of transport. v. 2
The line graph illustrates the number of products being transported in Britain for the past 32 years, starting in 1974, by four various types of transportation. Units are measured in millions of tonnes. Overall, the three types of transportation that were utilized had increased throughout the period, except rail that remains stable. It is noticeable that roads widely used for transportation with roughly 70 million tonnes as compared to pipelines at around 10 million tonnes in 1974 respectively. Although roads experienced significant fluctuations over the years, the figures continued to move up hitting the highest point of almost a hundred million tonnes, whereas pipelines reached gradually just above 20 million tonnes in 2002 respectively. Water transportation overtaken by rails at the beginning of the year, 1974 with figures approximately 38 million tonnes and 40 respectively. After 8 years, water transportation went up modestly to around 58 million tonnes while rails rapidly declined and hitting its lowest point of about 24 million tonnes in 1996 and peaked to just above 40 million of tonnes in 2002.
The line graph illustrates the number of products
being transported
in Britain for the past 32 years, starting in 1974, by four various types of
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transportation
. Units
are measured
in
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millions
of tonnes.

Overall
, the three types of
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transportation
that
were utilized
had increased throughout the period, except rail that remains stable.

It is noticeable that roads
widely
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used
for
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transportation
with roughly 70
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million
tonnes as compared to pipelines at around 10
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million
tonnes in 1974
respectively
. Although roads experienced significant fluctuations over the years, the figures continued to
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move
up hitting the highest point of almost a hundred
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million
tonnes, whereas pipelines reached
gradually
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just
above 20
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million
tonnes in 2002
respectively
.

Water
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transportation
overtaken by rails at the beginning of the
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year
, 1974 with figures approximately 38
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million
tonnes and 40
respectively
. After 8 years, water
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transportation
went up
modestly
to around 58
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million
tonnes while rails
rapidly
declined and hitting its lowest point of about 24
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million
tonnes in 1996 and peaked to
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just
above 40
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million
of tonnes in 2002.
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IELTS essay The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different mode of transport. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
175 words
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