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The graph below shows the proprotion of our differnt materials that were recycled from 1982 t0 2010 in a particular country. v.1

The graph below shows the proprotion of our differnt materials that were recycled from 1982 t0 2010 in a particular country. v. 1
In some countries, taking a year before starting university to discover the world and work is regarded as an advantage. For many adolescents, this habit has its benefits and drawbacks. Taking a gap year is an enriching experience for many young adults. After finishing high school, many teenagers suffer from being lost and not knowing their true purpose in life. However, if they take time to reflect on what they love and experience working or volunteering in different industries, they may find what field they like the most, thus, they can choose their university major easily. Furthermore, the lack of experience in life is another problem that adolescents face nowadays. For example, teenagers who spent their whole lives studying do not have the sufficient experience required for universities, due to that, travelling and working for a year can obviously enhance their knowledge. On the other hand, there are some disadvantages to taking a gap year. One of the most obvious drawbacks is skipping a year instead of going to university. Many adolescents do not favour taking gap years and are already confident about their experiences and purpose in life. These young adults start university before their peers who decide to take a year off, leading to a difference in education levels between people of the same age. An additional issue is financing. Some young adults wish to travel to places they dreamt of visiting to get to know their culture or to volunteer there. However, due to the lack of money, they cannot go which leads to disappointment and frustration. To conclude, a gap year undeniably has a positive impact on adolescents, yet there will always be drawbacks in terms of the education gap between them and their peers as well as financial issues.
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countries, taking a
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year
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before
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university
to discover the world and work
is regarded
as an advantage. For
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many
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adolescents
, this habit has its benefits and drawbacks.

Taking a
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gap
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year
is an enriching
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experience
for
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many
young adults. After finishing high school,
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many
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teenagers
suffer from
being lost
and not knowing their true purpose in life.
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, if they take time to reflect on what they
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love
and
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experience
working or volunteering in
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different
industries, they may find what field they like the most,
thus
, they can choose their
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university
major
easily
.
Furthermore
, the lack of
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experience
in life is another problem that
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adolescents
face nowadays.
For example
,
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teenagers
who spent their whole
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lives
studying do not have the sufficient
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experience
required for
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universities
, due to that, travelling and working for a
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year
can
obviously
enhance their knowledge.

On the other hand
, there are
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disadvantages to taking a
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gap
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year
. One of the most obvious drawbacks is skipping a
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year
instead
of going to
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university
.
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adolescents
do not
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favour
taking
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years and are already confident about their
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experiences
and purpose in life. These young adults
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start
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university
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before
their peers who decide to take a
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year
off, leading to a difference in education levels between
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people
of the same age. An additional issue is financing.
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Some
young adults wish to travel to places they dreamt of visiting to
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get
to know their culture or to volunteer there.
However
, due to the lack of money, they cannot go which leads to disappointment and frustration.

To conclude
, a
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gap
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year
undeniably
has a
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positive
impact on
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adolescents
,
yet
there will always be drawbacks in terms of the education
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gap
between them and their peers
as well
as financial issues.
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IELTS essay The graph below shows the proprotion of our differnt materials that were recycled from 1982 t0 2010 in a particular country. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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