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The bar chart below shows the exporting rate of 4 different types of fruit in the USA, Mexico and South Africa in 2012, measured by tons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The bar chart below shows the exporting rate of 4 different types of fruit in the USA, Mexico and South Africa in 2012, measured by tons.
It is irrefutable that city life is becoming more popular, nowadays. But it is argued that city life is not good for people's health. However, I have parted with this occurrence. There are some reasons why it is considered that city life is harmful for individual health. First and foremost reason is that the level of pollution is very high in cities. To put it simply, people facing many pollution related problems when they live in cities. For instance, the ratio of noise pollution as well as air pollution is increasing day by day in the cities. Which is not beneficial for human being's health because it creates many health decease like headache as well as lung problem. All in all this is the reason which depicts that city life is not good for living. On the other hand, living in a city is good in some ways. Moreover, in cities, people do not face any difficulty in poor health condition. As a reason, in cities, huge number of hospitals are available for giving better treatment to patients. For example, in Bathinda, a number of health care centres available and some hospitals give free medicine or treatment to patents which helps people a lot. For this reason, it is evidence that city life is good for living. To summarize, city life is harmful to individuals, but beneficial in some ways. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of city life is bad for people's health is cannot be supported. After though analysis on this subject, it is predicted that if people well do not live in cities, then it is difficult to get a better treatment in a critical condition.
It is irrefutable that city
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life
is becoming more popular, nowadays.
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it
is argued
that city
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life
is not
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good
for
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people
's
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health
.
However
, I have parted with this occurrence.

There are
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some
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reasons
why it
is considered
that city
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life
is harmful for individual
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health
.
First
and foremost
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reason
is that the level of
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pollution
is
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very
high in
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cities
. To put it
simply
,
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people
facing
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many
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pollution
related problems when they
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live
in
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cities
.
For instance
, the ratio of noise
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pollution
as well
as air
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pollution
is increasing day by day in the
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cities
. Which is not beneficial for human being's
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health
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because
it creates
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many
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health
decease like headache
as well
as lung problem. All in all this is the
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reason
which depicts that city
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life
is not
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good
for living.

On the other hand
, living in a city is
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good
in
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some
ways.
Moreover
, in
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cities
,
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people
do not face any difficulty in poor
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health
condition. As a
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reason
, in
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cities
, huge number of hospitals are available for giving better treatment to patients.
For example
, in
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Bathinda
, a number of
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health
care
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centres
available and
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some
hospitals give free medicine or treatment to patents which
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helps
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people
a lot. For this
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reason
, it is evidence that city
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life
is
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good
for living.

To summarize
, city
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life
is harmful to individuals,
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but
beneficial in
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some
ways.
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, it is
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clear
that the
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idea
of city
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life
is
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bad
for
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people
's
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health
is cannot
be supported
. After though analysis on this subject, it
is predicted
that if
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people
well do not
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live
in
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cities
, then it is difficult to
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get
a better treatment in a critical condition.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
One language sets you in a corridor for life. Two languages open every door along the way.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay The bar chart below shows the exporting rate of 4 different types of fruit in the USA, Mexico and South Africa in 2012, measured by tons.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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