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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005.
Education acts as a mediator between the students and the society, through which they are taught with many general things apart from arts, science or technology. So let us discuss if it is mandatory to include the lessons for the children in their school syllabus regarding the qualities to be a better parent in the future and conclude with my personal opinion. On one hand, adding such curriculum in their primary or higher education will feed them with the basic qualities of life, creating a better understanding between the children and their parents. This, in turn prepares them to be mature enough in their early stages such that they can face their own problems and also, to bring a better understanding about the value of their father and mother. On the other hand, a few children fail to realize the importance of such lessons as they are very young. Also, being a juvenile, they have to be taught with other important basic qualities of life in order to face their childhood. So, including parenting curriculum will add up their burden failing to realize both. For example, it is certainly no point in feeding the qualities of a good parent to a 10 years child who plays happily with his friends rather than a teenager who is about to take up responsibilities of life. To conclude with my opinion, I would suggest that there are certain qualities which are to be taught only in the particular stages. Moreover, parenting is a skill that requires practical experience rather than the theoretical knowledge. So it is better to be avoided in their school syllabus as it is too early for them to learn such qualities.
Education acts as a mediator between the students and the society, through which they
are taught
with
many
general things apart from arts, science or technology.
So
let
us discuss if it is mandatory to include the lessons for the children in their school syllabus regarding the
qualities
to be a
better
parent in the future and conclude with my personal opinion.

On one hand, adding such curriculum in their primary or higher education will feed them with the basic
qualities
of life, creating a
better
understanding between the children and their parents. This, in turn prepares them to be mature
enough
in their early stages such that they can face their
own
problems and
also
, to bring a
better
understanding about the value of their father and mother.

On the other hand
, a few children fail to realize the importance of such lessons as they are
very
young.
Also
, being a juvenile, they
have to
be taught
with other
important
basic
qualities
of life in order to face their childhood.
So
, including parenting curriculum will
add
up their burden failing to realize both.
For example
, it is
certainly
no point in feeding the
qualities
of a
good
parent to a 10 years child who plays
happily
with his friends
rather
than a
teenager
who is about to take up responsibilities of life.

To conclude
with my opinion, I would suggest that there are certain
qualities
which are to
be taught
only
in the particular stages.
Moreover
, parenting is a
skill
that requires practical experience
rather
than the theoretical knowledge.
So
it is
better
to
be avoided
in their school syllabus as it is too early for them to learn such
qualities
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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