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The graph below shows UK air pollutants in millions of tonnes, from three different sources, between 1990 and 2005. v.1

The graph below shows UK air pollutants in millions of tonnes, from three different sources, between 1990 and 2005. v. 1
Education plays a vital role in every student's life. It is believed by some people that homework should not be given to students regularly. On the other hand, some are in favour of giving homework to children in order to enhance study skill at school. I will discuss both views followed by my opinion in the subsequent paragraphs. To begin with, let us discuss the merits of not providing schoolwork on a daily basis to students. The major benefit would be that students can spend their leisure time in other activities such as co-curricular and creative activities. To explain, children indulge in different activities to enhance holistic development. For example, in Russia teachers keep students bag in a school so that they can perform physical activities in the playground. Furthermore, repeating the work at home can lead to getting more ideas of particular subjects. To elaborate, when students study at home, they get flexible time to study, therefore, they catch new thoughts about their study material. Moreover, by getting homework pupils can stay away from bad habit activities such as alcohol and smoking. For instance, according to study 3% of students in Delhi who do not get homework are addicted to smoking and drinking. In my opinion, I support the lateral point, because it has more benefits as it encourages the students to work hard for upcoming future as well as to get success in school too. To conclude, although, both the views have supportive answers still the lateral has more benefit in order to nourish the educational career child must study hard while getting homework every day. Thus, teachers should encourage their children to focus on routine homework.
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to children in order to enhance
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skill
at school. I will discuss both views followed by my opinion in the subsequent paragraphs.

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students
. The major benefit would be that
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students
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activities
such as co-curricular and creative
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. To
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, children indulge in
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to enhance holistic development.
For example
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students
bag in a school
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that they can perform physical
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in the playground.

Furthermore
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ideas
of particular subjects. To elaborate, when
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students
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at home, they
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flexible time to
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,
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material.
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pupils can stay away from
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habit
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such as alcohol and smoking.
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3% of
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in Delhi who do not
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are addicted
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because
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for upcoming future
as well
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success in school too.

To conclude
, although, both the views have supportive answers
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IELTS essay The graph below shows UK air pollutants in millions of tonnes, from three different sources, between 1990 and 2005. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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