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The government should pay for the course fees for everyone who wants to study at the university. v.1

The government should pay for the course fees for everyone who wants to study at the university. v. 1
Education is the backbone of a nation and the development of a country largely depends on its educational policy. The rapid development of the world and the ever-increasing competition are two reasons so many young students and professionals are looking for university education these days. The high cost of university education is still a reason many talented individuals cannot afford to get a higher degree and I strongly believe that it should be the government’s responsibility to make the education free and bear the expenses of university education. First, the government has a huge budget for the development of education sector and the money could be better utilised by ensuring university education for talented individuals. The government already funds the public university education and taking full responsibility of the cost would ensure quality education for all. The difficult admission process in the university level filters out the talented students to take part in university education and they should be backed up by the government funds to let them concentrate on their studies. In order to encourage graduate students and professionals to further their education government should pay for their courses as it would bring more benefits in the future for the country. Many European countries have already implemented this method and they have a huge number of skilled professionals who not only serve the country but also the whole world. More importantly, when citizens would be assured that the government will bear the cost of their children’s university education, they would be more interested in preparing their children for the university degree rather than sending them to work and earn. This would have a tremendous effect on the education level of the whole country. By supporting university course fees, the government would create more skilled professionals and without them, the development of the nation is quite impossible in this ever-accelerating era or science and technology. This is an effective method to drive more motivated and talented young towards the higher education and preparing them to take the leadership of the nation. In conclusion, paying for the university course fees by the government is indeed an effective measure for ensuring quality education for talented individuals and for an overall progress of a nation. It is a symbol of prosperity, better education policy and reassuring the citizens. So I reaffirm that the university education costs should be paid by the government.
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is the backbone of a nation and the
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development
of a
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country
largely
depends on its educational policy. The rapid
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development
of the world and the ever-increasing competition are two reasons
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so
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many
young students and
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professionals
are looking for
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university
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education
these days. The high
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cost
of
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university
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education
is
still
a reason
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many
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talented
individuals cannot afford to
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get
a higher degree and I
strongly
believe that it should be the
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government’s
responsibility to
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make
the
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education
free and bear the expenses of
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university
education.

First
, the
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government
has a huge budget for the
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development
of
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education
sector and the money could be better
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utilised
by ensuring
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university
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education
for
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talented
individuals. The
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government
already funds the public
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university
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education
and taking full responsibility of the
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cost
would ensure quality
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education
for all. The difficult admission process in the
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university
level filters out the
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talented
students to
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take part
in
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university
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education and
they should
be backed
up by the
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government
funds to
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let
them concentrate on their studies. In order to encourage graduate students and
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professionals
to
further
their
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education
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government
should pay for their courses as it would bring more benefits in the future for the
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country
.
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Many
European
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countries
have already implemented this
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method and
they have a huge number of skilled
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professionals
who not
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only
serve the
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country
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but
also
the whole world.

More
importantly
, when citizens would
be assured
that the
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government
will bear the
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cost
of their children’s
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university
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education
, they would be more interested in preparing their children for the
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university
degree
rather
than sending them to work and earn. This would have a tremendous effect on the
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education
level of the whole
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country
. By supporting
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university
course fees, the
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government
would create more skilled
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professionals
and without them, the
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development
of the nation is quite impossible in this ever-accelerating era or science and technology. This is an effective method to drive more motivated and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talented
young towards the higher
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education
and preparing them to take the leadership of the nation.

In conclusion
, paying for the
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university
course fees by the
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government
is
indeed
an effective measure for ensuring quality
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education
for
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talented
individuals and for an
overall
progress of a nation. It is a symbol of prosperity, better
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education
policy and reassuring the citizens.
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So
I reaffirm that the
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university
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education
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costs
should
be paid
by the
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government
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
59Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay The government should pay for the course fees for everyone who wants to study at the university. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
399 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
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