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The global phenomenon of urbanisation from the beginning of industrialisation to the present day has brought opportunity and prosperity, albeit at a cost in the quality of life.

The global phenomenon of urbanisation from the beginning of industrialisation to the present day has brought opportunity and prosperity, albeit at a cost in the quality of life. kPK2
Nowadays business face problems with new employees who just finished their education and lack some interpersonal skills such as working in a team. why do you think is the main cause of this problem and how can it be resolved? Soft skills not only influence corporate culture but will also decide the outcome of the company’s success. The companies, in today’s era, facing challenges because of lack of social skills namely teamwork, leadership in fresh graduates. Insufficient practical knowledge is the prominent reason behind this above said assertion and timely interaction of students with the industrialist by universities is the solution of the same, which this essay is going to delve in the forthcoming paragraphs with the help of relevant citation and will provide a credible conclusion as well, at the end. There is one major reason for the deficit of social skills in newcomers. The academic curriculum has minimal intervention of hands-on classes. The education system put stress on theoretical knowledge and encourage the students to elevate their scores; eventually most of the new learners has a perspective that better grades are sufficient to acquire good position in the business or workplace. Therefore. neglecting the human relationship traits which are consider as crucial parameter at any corporate culture. For instance, a novice holds first division in their subjects during graduate nowadays fails to adjust in the culture of the workplace resulting in degrade in his or her performance. One of the best ways to overcome this issue is to arrange time to time interactive classes and industrial training in the small and medium scale enterprises. This will not only provide a platform to the learners to acquire social traits but will also recognise their strengths and weaknesses as a result they will show interest in grabbing these capabilities and perform better in their career. To illustrate, if universities and institutes conduct skill development sessions for a few months’ student will get a chance to interact with various companies eventually they learn by the skill to succeed in life. To conclude, because of inadequate perform professional awareness in beginners many employees confront problem of shortage of social skill in them which can be overcome by conducting appropriate development classes by respective academies.
Nowadays business face problems with new employees who
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just
finished their education and lack
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some
interpersonal
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skills
such as working in a team.
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why
do you
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think
is the main cause of this problem and how can it
be resolved
?

Soft
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skills
not
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only
influence corporate culture
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but
will
also
decide the outcome of the
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company
’s success. The
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companies
, in
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today
’s era, facing challenges
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because
of lack of
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social
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skills
namely
teamwork, leadership in fresh graduates. Insufficient practical knowledge is the prominent reason behind this above said assertion and timely interaction of students with the industrialist by universities is the solution of the same, which this essay is going to delve in the forthcoming paragraphs with the
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help
of relevant citation and will provide a credible conclusion
as well
, at the
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end
.

There is one major reason for the deficit of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
in newcomers. The academic curriculum has minimal intervention of hands-on classes. The education system put
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
on theoretical knowledge and encourage the students to elevate their scores;
eventually
most of the new learners has a perspective that better grades are sufficient to acquire
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good
position in the business or workplace.
Therefore
.
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neglecting
the human relationship traits which are
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consider
as crucial parameter at any corporate culture.
For instance
, a novice holds
first
division in their subjects during graduate nowadays fails to adjust in the culture of the workplace resulting
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in degrade in
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his or her
performance.

One of the best ways to overcome this issue is to arrange time to time interactive classes and industrial training in the
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small
and medium scale enterprises. This will not
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only
provide a platform to the learners to acquire
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social
traits
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but
will
also
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recognise
their strengths and weaknesses
as a result
they will
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show
interest in grabbing these capabilities and perform better in their career. To illustrate, if universities and institutes conduct
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skill
development sessions for a few months’ student will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a chance to interact with various
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
eventually
they learn by the
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skill
to succeed in life.

To conclude
,
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because
of inadequate perform professional awareness in beginners
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many
employees confront problem of shortage of
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social
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skill
in them which can
be overcome
by conducting appropriate development classes by respective academies.
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IELTS essay The global phenomenon of urbanisation from the beginning of industrialisation to the present day has brought opportunity and prosperity, albeit at a cost in the quality of life.

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5 paragraphs
372 words
6.0
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