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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. MVg6
Some people think that the most important topic that we should give children, is History. Others think that Science and Technology should be viewed as the priority in education. In my view, Science and Technology are more critical, because, now countries which do not use modern technology will be a clony of other countries which use better technology. One the one hand, Science and Technology have become a major subject in recent years. All countries around the world with a better image, use advanced technological equipment. So, children should be equipped with knowledge of advanced technology to contribute to their country. Also, children who study Computer Science can easily find a scholarship in a collage, and after finishing the university find a good job because all companies who world-renowned present a job opportunities in technology-related departments. For example, when Apple, which is the most popular company in the World, needs a worker, will definitely prefer someone who studies Computer Engineering instead of someone who studies History. On the other hand, the most important thing, that about any countries, is History. People who do not have any knowledge about his or her own land, would not be able to notice mistakes that was made by somebody who was a scientist or a politician in the past. In addition, if cultural informations were not tought by teachers, children can not develop sense of commitment to their countries. Therefor, children should learn about significant events and people, to take a lesson from them. For instance, a woman who is a member of parliament, and work about woman rights, should know about other deputies who worked before her -school is the best place to learn that- to improve her proposal from goverment. As a result, to be a good citizen, we should have knowledge of our past, instead of Techology and Science. In my opinion, recently robot science and techology releted subjects have become the most important tools for develope countries. Government spent more than one million dollars every year for science. To illustrate, Nasa has 10 million allowances every year. If, young people have knowledge of science, they will have more chance to work in their. To conclude, even pupils should have historical informations to learn about their value and costums, technology and science has crucial role on individual's life in modern world.
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IELTS essay Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History.

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