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The given picture illustrates that the procedure of tomato ketchup with different

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The given picture illustrates that the procedure of tomato ketchup with different activities by workers. overall, it can be noticed that the whole process includes 15 steps to make sauce which is mainly starts from harvesting and finally finished with the packing and ready to sale in the market. First of all, tomatoes are picked and put it in the basket from the field by workers and then sorted them in good and bad in order to make sauce of better quality. After that, it is loaded into truck and send to the factory. Moreover, removes the skin, put out the seeds and wash them in container as well as to crush them properly. Furthermore, after mashing add other ingredients such as sugar, vinegar and salt accordingly. However, tomatoes are boiled and leave it for 2 hours. After cooling the sauce is put into the bottles then it is sent for labelling where check out the quality of ketchup for better selling in the market. If the sauces is made good then it is ready for final packing. last but not least, the whole packed material is delivered to the global market as due to people buy it from local shops to enjoy their junk food like hamburger and fries with tomato ketchup.
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picture illustrates that the procedure of tomato ketchup with
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different
activities by workers.
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overall
, it can
be noticed
that the whole process includes 15 steps to
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make
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sauce
which is
mainly
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starts
from harvesting and
finally
finished with the packing and ready to sale in the market.
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First of all
, tomatoes
are picked
and put it in the basket from the field by workers and then sorted them in
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good
and
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bad
in order to
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make
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sauce
of better quality. After that, it
is loaded
into truck and
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send
to the factory.
Moreover
, removes the skin, put out the seeds and wash them in container
as well
as to crush them
properly
.
Furthermore
, after mashing
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add
other ingredients such as sugar, vinegar and salt
accordingly
.
However
, tomatoes
are boiled
and
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leave
it for 2 hours. After cooling the
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sauce
is put
into the bottles then it is
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sent
for labelling where
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check
out the quality of ketchup for better selling in the market. If the
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sauces
is made
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good
then it is ready for final packing.
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last
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but
not least, the whole packed material
is delivered
to the global market as due to
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people
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buy
it from local shops to enjoy their junk food like hamburger and fries with tomato ketchup.
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IELTS essay The given picture illustrates that the procedure of tomato ketchup with different

Essay
  American English
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213 words
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