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The given maps show two di erent underground passage frameworks for autos in two Australian refers to v.1

The given maps show two di erent underground passage frameworks for autos in two Australian refers to v. 1
Few people choose to reside in warm areas, while others enjoy staying in cold weather. This essay will discuss both the views before concluding that both the climatic conditions are equally important. Some people love to stay in hot regions because they can wear loose and comfortable cotton clothes as well as enjoy the sunshine. For the beach lovers, this type of weather is deemed as the best as people can spend quality time with their family and friends at the beach. For example, a myriad of tourists visits Thailand every year just to enjoy the beaches, having a sunbath along with water sports. Furthermore, people can show their beauty and personality by wearing fashionable clothes instead of thick heavy coats. Another point to consider is that, for older people, warm temperature is considered as the best atmosphere as it reduces some health-related problems. Despite this, few prefer to live in countries with cooler climate as they enjoy snowfalls and cold weather trips. Moreover, a lot of youngsters who do not have a slim body like to wear long coats and trendy jackets during this weather. A recent survey done in Canada, exhibits that people enjoy the country’s cold climate because of the outdoor sports such as the outdoor ice skating and the Super Bowl. Therefore, some people like to enjoy the food served in this climate, while sitting next to the fire with their loved ones. In conclusion, although both the climates have some advantages and disadvantages, people’s choice plays a vital role in deciding the type of atmosphere they want to live in.
Few
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people
choose to reside in warm areas, while others
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enjoy
staying in
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cold
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weather
. This essay will discuss both the views
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before
concluding that both the climatic conditions are
equally
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important
.

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Some
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people
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love
to stay in hot regions
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because
they can wear loose and comfortable cotton clothes
as well
as
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enjoy
the sunshine. For the beach lovers, this type of
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weather
is deemed
as the best as
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people
can spend quality time with their family and friends at the beach.
For example
, a myriad of tourists visits Thailand every year
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just
to
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enjoy
the beaches, having a sunbath along with water sports.
Furthermore
,
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people
can
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show
their beauty and personality by wearing fashionable clothes
instead
of thick heavy coats. Another point to consider is that, for older
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people
, warm temperature
is considered
as the best atmosphere as it
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reduces
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some
health-related problems.

Despite this, few prefer to
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live
in countries with cooler
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climate
as they
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enjoy
snowfalls and
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cold
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weather
trips.
Moreover
,
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a lot of
youngsters who do not have a slim body like to wear long coats and trendy jackets during this
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weather
. A recent survey done in Canada, exhibits that
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people
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enjoy
the country’s
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cold
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climate
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because
of the outdoor sports such as the outdoor ice skating and the Super Bowl.
Therefore
,
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some
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people
like to
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enjoy
the food served in this
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climate
, while sitting
next
to the fire with their
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loved
ones.

In conclusion
, although both the
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climates
have
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some
advantages and disadvantages,
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people’s
choice plays a vital role in deciding the type of atmosphere they want to
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live
in.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The given maps show two di erent underground passage frameworks for autos in two Australian refers to v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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