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The given first pie chart gives information about typical Australian household energy usages while the second pie chart presents the rate of greenhouse gas emissions caused by Australian household, which lead to environmental problems. v.2

The given first pie chart gives information about typical Australian household energy usages while the second pie chart presents the rate of greenhouse gas emissions caused by Australian household, which lead to environmental problems. v. 2
The given first pie chart provides information about typical Australian household energy usages while the second pie chart presents the rate of CO2 emission caused by Australian households that came from the consequence of energy consumption. In general, Australians in each family tend to utilise the heating systems with the great deal proportion and these release greenhouse gas significantly. As for the use of energy for heating, heating comprised of 42% but, this emitted just less half of CO2 emissions while using of water heating was nearly a third which was the similar amount of co2 emissions. In contrast, cooling was spent only 2% which was the lowest and only was released just 3% of green gas. When it comes to other energy usages, the reminded total amount of energy consumptions consisted of 26% but the entire rate of CO2 emissions comprised of double the amount. Overall, it can be seen that the heating system in Australian seems to be impractical regarding energy usages, and such power contributes to environmental problems and climate change potentials.
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while using of water
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usages, the reminded total amount of
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consumptions
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comprised of double the amount.

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system in Australian seems to be impractical regarding
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usages, and such power contributes to environmental problems and climate
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potentials.
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IELTS essay The given first pie chart gives information about typical Australian household energy usages while the second pie chart presents the rate of greenhouse gas emissions caused by Australian household, which lead to environmental problems. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
175 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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