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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result form this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compa v.1

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result form this energy use.
The world has witnessed lately an increasing number of small families over the big ones. This essay will discuss a couple of benefits and drawbacks of small families. What is advantageous about having a small size family is that it entails less financial support and less problems to deal with. To begin with, the more children there are, the more expensive it becomes to provide a decent living for them. This means that parents have a hard time satisfying the needs of their kids. For example, a recent study suggested that in the USA, upper-middle class families fall to middle-class because parents struggle to pay their children’s education fees. Further, parents in small families do not worry much about their children compared to large families where squabbles amongst siblings are always on. For example, in Sweden the majority of families are of no more than 2 kids. This is considered one the reasons why it is considered one of the happiest countries. However, the fact of having small families has its share of drawbacks as children do not find companions to interact with and small families curb the competition among siblings. First off, children miss the chance to play with their brother/sister while growing up and tend to feel lonely. This might also affect their future lives if they do not socialise with the outsiders. Moreover, a low number of siblings limits children from pushing themselves to the maximum to show their talents in order to earn their parents’ pride. Evidence, for instance, shows that the most successful and wealthiest people were living in a large family and they had to work harder than the others to stand out. To conclude, having a small family is beneficial as it does not need a fat bank account and entails less concerns. Yet, it has drawbacks like absence of siblings to play with and less competition among brothers and sisters.
The world has witnessed lately an increasing number of
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over the
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big
ones. This essay will discuss a couple of benefits and drawbacks of
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small
families.

What is advantageous about having a
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size
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family
is that it entails
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less
financial support and
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less
problems to deal with. To
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begin
with, the more
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children
there are, the more expensive it becomes to provide a decent living for them. This means that
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parents
have a
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hard
time satisfying the needs of their kids.
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, a recent study suggested that in the USA, upper-middle
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class
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families
fall to middle-
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class
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because
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parents
struggle to pay their
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children’s
education fees.
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,
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parents
in
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small
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families
do not worry much about their
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children
compared to large
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where squabbles amongst
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siblings
are always on.
For example
, in Sweden the majority of
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families
are of no more than 2 kids. This
is considered
one the reasons why it
is considered
one of the happiest countries.

However
, the fact of having
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small
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families
has its share of drawbacks as
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children
do not find companions to interact with and
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small
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families
curb the competition
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among
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siblings
.
First
off,
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children
miss the chance to play with their brother/sister while growing up and tend to feel lonely. This might
also
affect their future
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lives
if they do not
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socialise
with the outsiders.
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, a low number of
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siblings
limits
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children
from pushing themselves to the maximum to
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show
their talents in order to earn their
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parents’
pride. Evidence,
for instance
,
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shows
that the most successful and wealthiest
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people
were living in a large
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family and
they had to work harder than the others to stand out.

To conclude
, having a
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small
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family
is beneficial as it does not need a
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fat
bank account and entails
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less
concerns.
Yet
, it has drawbacks like absence of
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siblings
to play with and
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less
competition
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among
brothers and sisters.
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IELTS essay The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result form this energy use.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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