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The function and fashion of eyeglasses

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The lecture represents that the first glasses made it for climate when the weather is dreadful and snowing. Consequently it is made from bone, animals or any such extradionary materials. However it hasn’t got lens. Therefore, no one certainly figured out who made the eyeglasses. Nevertheless some individuals comprehend that approximately the first eyeglasses were estimated to have been made in Italy.

The lecture represents that the first
 glasses made it for climate when the weather is dreadful and snowing. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Consequently,
Consequently
 it is made
 from bone, animals or any such Possible spelling mistake found.extraordinary
extradionary
 materials. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
 it hasn’t This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 lens. Therefore
, no one certainly
 figured out who made the eyeglasses. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Nevertheless,
Nevertheless
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 individuals comprehend that approximately the first
 eyeglasses were estimated
 to have been made
 in Italy. 

IELTS essay The function and fashion of eyeglasses

Essay

American English

1 paragraphs

62 words

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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
Include an introduction and conclusion
Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 5.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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