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The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. v. 2
One of the most debatable issues of the last century has been the extent to which international trade benefits or harms national economies. Many arguments have been made for and against free trade between nations. In this essay, I will discuss both views and state my own position. Those who support the expansion of global free trade claim that economies grow faster when they can specialize in just a few industries in which they have a strong advantage. As a result, each region or country produces something of value to the world economy. For example, East Asia manufactures electronic goods, the Middle East exports energy, and the EU produces luxury items. Free trade proponents claim that dependence on global trade helps to strengthen international cooperation and prevent wars. Meanwhile, opponents of free trade-sometimes called ‘protectionists’-claim that the unrestricted movement of goods and services causes damage to local communities. This is because jobs are lost when it becomes cheaper to import a product than to produce it domestically. They also argue that the vast distances travelled by food, oil, and consumer goods is harming the environment and making our lives unsustainable. Protectionists are in favour of tighter controls on the movement of goods and services in order to protect jobs and livelihoods. In conclusion, while there are convincing arguments on both sides of the debate, a return to protectionist policies would surely be a mistake. I believe that global trade is inevitable and should not be restricted. It is no longer realistic for nations to source all of their energy, food, and manufactured goods within their own borders.
One of the most debatable issues of the last century has been the extent to which international
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benefits or harms national economies.
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Many
arguments have
been made
for and against
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free
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trade
between nations. In this essay, I will discuss both views and state my
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own
position.

Those who support the expansion of global
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free
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trade
claim that economies grow faster when they can specialize in
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just
a few industries in which they have a strong advantage.
As a result
, each region or country produces something of value to the world economy.
For example
, East Asia manufactures electronic
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goods
, the Middle East exports energy, and the EU produces luxury items.
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Free
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trade
proponents claim that dependence on global
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trade
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helps
to strengthen international cooperation and
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prevent
wars.

Meanwhile, opponents of
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free
trade-
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sometimes
called ‘protectionists’-claim that the unrestricted movement of
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goods
and services causes damage to local communities. This is
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because
jobs
are lost
when it becomes cheaper to import a product than to produce it
domestically
. They
also
argue that the vast distances travelled by food, oil, and consumer
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goods
is harming the environment and making our
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lives
unsustainable. Protectionists are in
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favour
of tighter controls on the movement of
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goods
and services in order to protect jobs and livelihoods.

In conclusion
, while there are convincing arguments on both sides of the debate, a return to protectionist policies would
surely
be a mistake. I believe that global
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trade
is inevitable and should not
be restricted
. It is no longer realistic for nations to source all of their energy, food, and manufactured
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goods
within their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
borders.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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