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The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. You shoul v.4

The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. You shoul v. 4
Nowadays, due to proliferating globalization dramatic climate change is observed on the earth which represents a major threat to life on this planet. However, some folks think that they should accept this change rather than stopping it. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this opinion. Firstly, we should create awareness among the people to grow more and more trees. Consequently, this lush green beauty helps in controlling the increasing temperature on the earth. As trees are considered to be the best absorbent of hazardous carbon dioxide gas. For example, countries covered with the healthy green environment are merely prone to the climatic change. Secondly, the government should step forward and make some stringent rules to lower down the pollution emitted from the vehicle as well as from the factories. As this pollution is depleting our ozone layer which directly impacts the climate. Furthermore, this layer is responsible for saving our planet from the heat of the sun. Thus, use of electric vehicles and alternative fuels should be encouraged to deal with climate change. For instance, people of countries like the Netherlands after adopting electric technology are enjoying the salubrious and pleasant climate. If instead of taking the above measures we simply continue to live with the climate change the consequence will be disastrous. Natural resources like water and more should start depleting due to change changes in the climate. Additionally, frequent flood will be noticed in the low lying areas due to rising temperature. Hence it causes many pernicious diseases. So living with the problem of climatic change will be hazardous for to the people. In conclusion, I assert that we should take the above measures to prevent this situation of climate change rather than living with it and make planet earth a beautiful heaven to live.
Nowadays, due to proliferating globalization dramatic
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climate
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change
is observed
on the earth which represents a major threat to life on this planet.
However
,
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some
folks
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that they should accept this
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change
rather
than stopping it. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this opinion.

Firstly
, we should create awareness among the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to grow more and more trees.
Consequently
, this lush green beauty
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in controlling the increasing temperature on the earth.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
trees
are considered
to be the best absorbent of hazardous carbon dioxide gas.
For example
, countries covered with the healthy green environment are
merely
prone to the climatic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.

Secondly
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should step forward and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
stringent
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
to lower down the pollution emitted from the vehicle
as well
as from the factories. As this pollution is depleting our ozone layer which
directly
impacts the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
climate
.
Furthermore
, this layer is responsible for saving our planet from the heat of the sun.
Thus
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of electric vehicles and alternative fuels should
be encouraged
to deal with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
climate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
.
For instance
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
of countries like the Netherlands after adopting electric technology are enjoying the salubrious and pleasant climate.

“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
instead
of taking the above measures we
simply
continue to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
climate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
the consequence will be disastrous. Natural resources like water and more should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
depleting due to
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change
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changes
in the
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climate
.
Additionally
, frequent flood will
be noticed
in the
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low lying
areas due to rising temperature.
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Hence
it causes
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many
pernicious diseases.
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So
living with the problem of climatic
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change
will be hazardous for to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

In conclusion
, I assert that we should take the above measures to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
this situation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
climate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
rather
than living with it and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
planet earth a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
heaven to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. You shoul v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
298 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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