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The first time when i started using the cell phone

The first time when i started using the cell phone Mrrle
When I was in ninth grade, I was exposed to new technology. That's the cell phone. When I did, my parents made plans for my use in school. And when I got that, I really didn't know how to use it, but I was exploring it, and it wasn't too hard to use it. It has been useful for me to use in learning, just connect to the Internet and the material I need to find appears. Every time I'm bored, it's sort of what helps me relax, like listening to music, watching a movie. . . Thanks to the phone, I was able to keep up with new information every day. It's really handy for me.
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connect to the Internet and the material I need to find appears. Every time I'm bored, it's sort of what
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IELTS essay The first time when i started using the cell phone

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
117 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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